Pontificating dogmatic bullshit keeps…
Lemming’s eyes, wired shut.
Tunnel vision, in a box of belief.
Never to read, from the book of truth.
Forever trapped in a shallow chapter.
Running through surface gray matter
of a well beaten neural pathway
in the blissful land, of ignorant sheep.
Blinded by a mandated complacency
the sweet scent of suffering, goes far beyond
the first of Buddha's nobel truths.
Stifling is the stench, of this internal decay.
A spiritual blood letting, of society’s skin
will drain the cancerous pustules, of failed dogma.
Our hearts must be open, for the grace of second chance.
Author notes
POW Contest
Theme:The silent acceptance of the complacency and stagnation of spiritual growth in the Human Race as a whole
In a list
A contest entry
- Poem of the Week - POW - by Bear by Arkbear.
1150 points, ended March 8, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think you mean in America. We're a purely puritanical society, nothing else. I say yes.
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This piece confused me with its message, but after some thought, it makes sense to me now. The spiritual confusions in our world create many obstacles which are becoming harder to eventually overcome.
Very good write.
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Congrats on the gold. Your imagery and vocabulary are astounding, and this speaks strongly, with a good voice.
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I was meant to be helping judge this but my computer went down, I had read and reread them all, and this was my favourite, so if I had been on the judging panel you still would have won
so a big congratulations from me!
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congrats on the gold. This is pretty graphic and I felt myself cringing at words like pustules, etc. I shiver now ... wonderful imagery though.
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Congrats on the Gold Bill!
AND you have written just as well before!
Glad to finally see you get the Gold you deserve!
Write on!
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....nice job Bill
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Hello -
*well-beaten*
I have nothing else here to critique.....best in contest.....so far.....I have 2 more to read
Good luck and God bless,
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Title 8.5....had me curious..but, I would not click on it unless I wanted to read about this Genre -
Flow 10....great Flow....your word choices created the Tone and made for Great reading -
Depth 10.. depth is superb...a tad broken in thought, but displayed as a visual masterpiece -
Theme 9.95....a Theme which you can find all day long...especially here on AP...but when it is penned this well, it is going to score highly -
Feelings 9.95...dramatic and impossible to NOT be caught up -
Grammar 10.. nice grammatical choices....VERY impressed -
Presentation 10...Love it!...I enjoy a Poet who is not cliche'-format-intensive -
Uncommonness...9.75...not as creative as I lookor, but it sure is penned well and pulls me in.....ALL, the way in and does not let me go -
Sit & Ponder Affect 9.95...I did ponder....had to read it a few times....loved it -
Ability to follow Rules 10.0....are you having trouble with your white background?....no deductions, as we have always accepted as close to white as you can get it...nice job
-Bears Score: 98.1
Excellent job
One of your best!
No editing once a Judge has touched your work -
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Really quite powerful! "Our hearts must be open, for the grace of second chance." Yes indeed!
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This is a nice write but the religious theme has been used so much in these contest lately that it is getting to be an ongoing theme that is not uncommon at all and in my honest opinion that alone is enough to make me want to pull my entry as it seems no matter how creative I am or how much I step outside the box of creativity that I will not get anywhere with my poem in this contest due the preference and views of the different judges.
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Starz....please do not be discouraged by his Theme or how your Theme may or may not fit in....concentrate on your Theme and pen it with brilliance.....that is how you get my attention....you have been with me long enough to know that by now.....Bear -
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Wow this piece is very very good. The beginning blew me away. nice choice in words keep it up.
-deadly
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Great write Bill!
I'm sure you may hear it is not uncommon though..
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
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