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My Strength

I cant take all the tears,
I cant face my fears

I try so hard to be strong,
But the strength I have doesn't last long

And with you my heart becomes easy to break,
Why did you always act so fake,

Was this relationship a mistake,
I don't know how much more of this I can take

 

And then sometimes when your around,

I feel as if I'm drowning

We never speak,
And sometimes not even for weeks

You make my life depressing,
Why do I keep obsessing






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  • attack110
    March 7

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    A similar situation, I know this pain all to well, I think youve done a fantastic job of expressing this.
    The only criticism i may have with it is that when i hit line's 11 and 12 it threw me off without the rhyme.

    Still great work


  • TabbyCat
    March 6
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    wow! A very good, smooth rhyming piece! I like it babe.


  • Veronica-Armijo
    March 6

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    Bravo

    I like it. You might want to look at line 10 "I feel as if I'm drowning" it doesn't really flow as smoothly as the rest of the poem. But overall very well done.


    • PoetryStar2
      March 6
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      yah i k but my friend but it in there for me and i didnt wanna hurt her feelings

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