While gray skies threatened rainfall
and my mood was likewise dark,
I mulled all my afflictions
as I scowled around the park.
The primrose by the walkway
Called attention to her bliss,
With her lightly glowing petals
All the color of a kiss.
What had this plant to savor?
I churlishly did ask.
Replied the little flower,
"To bloom's my only task."
"With just a tiny bit of rain,
and a dollop of the sun,
I spread my heart wide open
to share with everyone."
I saw her frail green leafings,
and how shallow was her sprout,
yet she offered up her petals
to all walkers hereabout.
My eyes soaked up her beauty,
as my soul took time to breathe.
I thanked the blushing flower
and heart-lightened, took my leave.
Author notes
The color is Pink.
Comments
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This is a lovely and endearing piece, Lita. I've always preferred roses and wildflowers. My grandfather raised roses, and I had a tea rose bush later in life. They do reward us for our cultivating efforts. The primrose is such a beautiful flower, albeit a seemingly frail one. 
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Fantastic! You stuck to the rules and wrote a beautiful poem and even utilized other colors while not writing the color you were portraying. I could see the flowers beautifully. Great rhythm and flow on top of everything else. The last stanza is definately the best.
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Thank you for your very kind comments! Your contest actually was perfect for my poem. Lita
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I love how you remind us all of how we should take the time to wonder at the simple beauty that is all around us. You are absolutely right with this piece—I wouldn’t want you to take away from this at all to fit within the 100 words or less rule. You have written something that is special to you (as you have IMed me), and I wouldn’t suggest a thing to alter this. This is beautiful, and I am happy to find it here.
Thank you so much for sharing this with me. To quote a line from your poem, “my soul took time to breathe” when I read this, which I really needed.
Saffron
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Being a nature lover and an avid gardener, you know I can relate to this. Hot the part about being in a bad mood nut the part about how just seeing the beauties and wonder of nature can truly change that mood. I read somewhere how gardening can actually extend your lifespan. I don't know how true it is but I do know when I'm outdoors in my garden time seem to stand still. Even a caterpillar can hold my attention for long periods of time. This is another beautiful poem.
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I've never seen primroses. I don't think we have it here so it is a delight to read this.
and ditto with the last line for the read.
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I loved the line "I saw her frail green leaflings". That was stunning for some reason! Awesome job! Good luck in the ocntest!
Best wishes to you!
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Very nice
I'll never look at primroses the same again.
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Wow!!! This was wonderful!!! I felt that this flower was personified in a way where I could relate! That's something right there! Congratulations on writing something so full of fantastic and deeply detailed imagery and meaning. It was so simple and beautiful. I loved it alot. Thank you for writing.
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You know, even writing something like this gets you focusing on the positives in life. A fine job all around here, now if only we'd get a few dollops of sun in Michigan! Best to you as always... Jim
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Worthy indeed. Well written with dexterity and excellent word choice!
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That was very well written you really take the color pink and give t a whole new essence! Congrats! I really enjoyed the rhymig of it and the taste you gave from your words!! All best of luck in the contest!
B tru 2 u
Unbreakable<3...
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Very well done. I am sitting here looking at 2 feet of dirty snow and mud with the possibility of more snow in the forecast. Your poem reminds that spring will eventually arrive.
Mike
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A delightful poem to read. I liked 'as my soul took time to breathe'.
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Delicate touch here.
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so metaphoric
well done, I enjoyed this greatly.
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This is so sweet. I love poems with happy endings! Kudos and good luck in the contest!
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A very lovely write. Nice rhymes and a great flow. Well done. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Oh it is sooo beautiful and very deep good job i loved it why can't my guy write a poem like that hmmmm
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WOW, Outstanding!
and like the beauty of the subject of this piece..you have 'shared' a gift you were given; with a write that will lighten the heart of many who read this wonderfully flowing, and eloquent work of art!
you ROCK big sis!!
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This is a very witty and pretty poem; it is well written and well constructed. I really like it.
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Truly Marvelous!
Wow hawk...I can only imagine how it felt to write like this. I love this poem and its inticing beauty; its great message and wonderful merit. The sound was uplifting and so was the picture. You captured something of the soul of these flowers it seemed and I appreciated it right away. The reading was easy, flowing and amazingly hopeful. One of my favorites by you now. The powerful lines vie for attention but this set poked me repeatedly:
"With just a tiny bit of rain,
and a dollop of the sun,
I spread my heart wide open
to share with everyone."
Bravo!!! All the best to you in this contest sis.
AsIThink...
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shivers
What had this plant to savor?
I churlishly did ask.
Replied the little flower,
To bloom's my only task.
if only we all knew our tasks!!!
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I wish we did, too; and I wish they were as straightforward as "To bloom"! Lita
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This is a sweet poem, telling how the beauty and depth of this flower affected your mood.
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Thank you for your kind remarks, H. I always appreciate your reading my work.
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I think you nailed this contest, (or you should nail it anyways.) Even the most simplest of things could be the most beautiful, and this is why I love living
The most gorgeous piece ever, really is breathtaking.
Love this one auntie
p.s. I would give you more applause but they only allow three
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You are very kind, and I'm glad you liked it; however, I re-read the rules, and the contest-holder prefers free-verse! Oops! I had fun anyway. Thank you, as always, your Auntie M.
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Once again,an actually good poem that rhymes as well!! I liked what it was about: a person restless and in a dark mood,but who found some peace in something as simple as a flower.
I relate to it really well because that really is all i ever want: peace of mind.
Good job with this i enjoyed reading it!
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Thank you so much! Me, too -- the peace of mind is a greater gift than most people appreciate. Lita
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This was a joy to read and it brightened my day as well as yours. A beautiful spring poem and we certainly need all the help we can get at the moment
All the best in the contest
Sue
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Thank you, Sue. I'm finding it easier to keep a meter than I did at first, and these sorts of simple rhymes are rather fun to write. I'm always happy when someone gets a smile from something I write! Lita
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Simply the best!
I haven't read a poem like this which I have loved this much in a long time, possibly even never. So beautiful, I can't think of the words to say how much I loved this. Definitely will bookmark it for more reads. Sometimes it's the simpler verse which holds the softest touch. Totally in awe...alby
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You are incredibly kind, alby. I was worried that this might have sounded too "Hallmark Greeting Card", but hoped it was more along the line of Emily Dickenson... one can always strive, yes??? I just felt the need to write something happier than my last few rants
Lita
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Yeah, I've just posted two sad ones on my page and am feeling the need to post something in a happier vain, so I know what you mean. I didn't sense 'Hallmark' lingering 'round this at all, I was just perfect.
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Here she is running to read... L.
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outstanding yeah! so very well written in terms of rhythm and such, but even better for me was the wording. and the light touches of humour brought a smile. best of luck with it!
C
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OMG how did you have time to read this? I barely was able to choose the background color! Thanks so much for your very kind remarks. I just felt the need for an upbeat poem. Lita
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lol they pop up quickly and I just happened to look at new by favourites right then lolol. that has happened to me before! It is upbeat, and lovely!
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