like a blanket the ice sits.
in the moon light softly lit .
beneath the frozen chill.
the water lays there still.
motionless it silently waits.
for summers worm welcoming gates.
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This is good
Keep writing
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An emotive piece that instantly takes the reader into the cold and chill of the weather. The picture fits in beautifully with the poem. You seem to have periods at the end of each line, is this intended? For you haven't started each line with a capital letter, which is a little confusing. I think perhaps you mean "warm" rather than "worm" in the final line. An enjoyable read.....
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Amazing piece, fits perfectly with the image.
Well done!
Nela -
This is an excellent write that you have going on here. I loved the picture it really did add to the lovely flow and rhyme of your work. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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ah scene of cold where smiles will gather in hearts as wishes skate circles for summer's arrival, a good poem.
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This was such a beautiful poem. I do think, though, that it would be easier to read if there wasn't so much puncuation. Also, in the last line, you spelled "warm" wrong. The picture adds even more beauty to this poem. Wonderful write.
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ur poems seem meaningful
like they have sum untold meaning or reason behind the words
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oh this was lovely! i love the pic too...
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Well done with this poem Nic! A short but
brilliant piece filled with some great imagery
here. Thanks a lot for sharing it with us all
here and keep up the wonderful work!
Jeremy0826 -
I love the imagery. I really like the longing for the summer time. Great write (:
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Brief, but lovely and well written with great imagery.
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I really love this piece. Simple and imaginitive!
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beautiful imagery.
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this,
was great. i loved how you said 'like a blanket the ice sits' instead of the opposite way around!
awesome job! -
awsome
this really turned out good son. I think we found another talent you have from Nic grandpa, and nic your dad. lets fallow through on this one. by the way, you need to join the library group I am in.
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hey if you want to you can join the Friends of trekkergirl group as well. We are a very fast growing group who are very active in our reading list reading and commenting. We also have group contests, and weekly and monthly polls with awards and points given out. We are a lot of different people from different areas of the world. We also have a lot of different ages from teenager to older adults. So you are welcomed to join if you wish to. We can be found at: http://allpoetry.com/group/show/friends+of+trekkergirl please please guys do come check us out.
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Although short, this is a fine piece. I could almost feel the cold.
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It's amazing. I wish I could rhyme like that.
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dude, that was pretty sweet! i liked it!
paints a very nice picture in my head. welcome to ap!
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