Pain
cannot
be erased
with a single
waving of a hand.
Rotting, settling deep
within the core of the heart
until it bores holes to your soul,
pain imprisons your mind ruthlessly
leaving you defenseless against yourself.
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Obscured in darkness, festering blindly,
reaching outward for signs of living
in a world filled with decayed rot;
soft whispers enter your head
and hands lay upon you.
As ache peels away
you recognize,
at long last,
there is
hope.
In a list
A contest entry
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Comments
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I love the delicate inner-line rhyme of "until it bores holes to your soul".
The last five lines are my favourite. Towards the middle of your poem I wasn't sure where it was going, the flow seemed a bit off, but the ending is brilliant. Your poem gets to where it's going. The impact is awesome.
Thanks for your entry!
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Awesome form and what a write!
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beautiful! Loved the font and the physical look of the poem. Thank your for entering my contest and good luck!
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you really did great on this the transition from pain to hope that was fasinating.
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the poem was well constructed to be sure. It shows you have great skill. But this is more of a lost in darkness and finding hope kind of poem. I didn't really get the sense of balance playing through. I thank you for entering the contest though. I liked to poem.
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Great. Love this!
Will work wonderfully.
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A good poem that you have written here.
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i absolutly love the lay out
and i like the poem
could you put "cheer up lizzy" in your AN plz -
Brilliant write.
I enjoyed this one.
Loved the format of
it.Thanks for entering and good luck -
This is so true. I love the form!
Amazing word choice, loved it.
Thanks for entering and good luck. -
Incredible write..
This said as much as a book some
overlook on the shelf..sitting right next to
a book called,.
"life and understanding".
Beautifully written.
Than you so much for sharing and the very best
to you in the contest.
Love Peace
campanaro
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ooo... I'd jam that up... it's really dark, I like it... it also goes into that little thing where it can move down from painto hope...
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Brilliant, amazing structure and well written words. Blessings.
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