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~Lovers Crave~

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

Sitting on the porch.

wrapped in my robe; I hear the

rustling of trees.

 

 

 

the cool night breeze

feels good against my naked

skin.

 

 

 

Earlier I woke from a dream; it

left me craving you, it was

3:00 AM.

 

 

taking a puff of a

cigarette. I flick the ash into the

air. the wind caught it and took

it away.

 

 

 

I wish this craving would leave

the same way.

 

 

I don’t like being powerless, or

under your control. I won’t deny

you leave me wanting more.

 

 

I want to bring you to peaks of

ecstasy and use my mouth to take

you there.

 

 

 

Hearing the intake of your breath

and moans that escape you with

each lick and taste.

 

 

Delving into your deepest

secret fantasies Is what I do best.

 

 

 

 

There's no talk of love spoken.even

though there is.

 

Just us being what we are,

 

 

when lovers crave.

 

 

 

 

 

Rend The Veil

 

Author notes

 44. I can’t get enough of you baby

 

 

please leave comment, and I would gladly return the favor

if you want to help critique please I M me.

The form and structure of this piece was written in my own

style,I wanted it to be slow and deliberateR 

 

 

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  • Bruce silver member
    October 21, 2009

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    Awesome! You do such a wonderful job of evoking a mood with your attention to detail. This is the mark of a very talented writer! And you are!


  • sweet arrival gold member
    August 15, 2009

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    i can picture this so easily... the front porch with my robe on and nothing else. the breeze lifting it slightly as it seems to cool my skin underneath. craving when my mouth will speak in a language of no words.
    this gives me tingles... sensually romantic.


  • rbruce gold member
    June 10, 2009

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    A wonderfully sensuous piece of beautiful poetry. I congratulate you, for hinting at everything, yet leaving one's imagination space to complete the picture.


  • penman gold member
    May 9, 2009

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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well described. Such a joy to read. You words are so skillfully used. Thank you for sharing


  • Daizee silver member
    March 12, 2009
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    Why is is always the middle of the night those cravings hit? Loved your words...

    Love,
    Stacy


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 23, 2009
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      can you believe that! why is it?

      thank you so muc h for your comment

      Blessings

      Rend


  • IronMaiden1236
    March 12, 2009

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    Great subliminals

    Nice to see another writer who "gets" the less is more part of poetry...otherwise it's just alot of words!!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      April 23, 2009
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      thank you so much,,

      your comments mean alot to me. please forgive for not returning the favor

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Dajuan
    March 12, 2009

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    Loved the pace this poem is taking

    I know it being a long time since I been on this website.But hopefully I be currently on this site for a while.

    Now the direction of this poem steer me, was a ride worth taking. Everyone knows what a craving can do to us. What fantasy does with that need.

  • Olea
    March 6, 2009

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    there is a kind of potential energy inside these undisciplined stanzas, like when someone balances on the high edge of lust, dangerously close to falling in love.

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 6, 2009
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      thank you so much for commenting

      your comments are most welcome,

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Nom de Plume
    March 5, 2009

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    steamy write my friend, enjoyed the imagery and like this new style of yours... truly enjoyed reading
    good luck

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      Thank you Rob,

      its always a pleasure to read your commnets

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    March 5, 2009

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    lol You know a cigarette and these feelings go hand in hand,I suppose because both are cravings. The only difference is that one kills slowly..hmmm hang on perhaps both of them do...but you can buy one and not the other C


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      Gosh! isnt that so true!

      I didnt think they both cam kill you. ha ha .. thank you so much for stoping by and commenting

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    March 5, 2009

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    Great write. Great take on the pic and the prompt. Thank you so much for entering. I absolutely loved reading this!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      I had just written it,

      Thank you so much for the contest and for commenting

      Many blesings to you

      Rend


  • thepoetssoul
    March 5, 2009

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    Well well who's naughty thoughts are these
    It is an exellent piece of poetry, full of sensual longing
    Your words are going to set my house on fire, damn!!
    Thanks for sharing your inner most desire's.

    Tony


  • Maxboy gold member
    March 5, 2009
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    Very nice write sweetie, very compelling.

    Best wishes in the contest


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    March 5, 2009
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    Godless But Divine

    I miss you and your writtings..
    @}-;----


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      I am so glad you stopped by,

      you have been gone a long
      time, welcome back and
      Thank you for your comment
      Blessings

      Rend


  • Swan song gold member
    March 5, 2009
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    Every stamza isa new and precious gulp of fresh air. You are nothing less than stunning

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      Thank you for stopping,

      I always look forward to
      your comments,

      Blessings

      Rend

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