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Conformists Vs. Poets

"Conforming to society's standards restricts artistic freedom."
      - Tim Sutherland

Society: known to hinder
and juxtapose
carnal creative impulses.

Masking souls in
rules: Restrictive and depriving.
Begging to be disobeyed.

Yet staunchly, CONFORMITY,
like a toxin seeps into artistic veins,
no longer free-willed poets: captives.

Just slaves of conformist designs.
Perfect products of society.

But poetic desire reigns strong,
and shouldn't be trifled with.

Author notes

I hope this works with the contest.
I believe the poem itself is 53 words, I do hope that is okay. I cut it down from 85 words. It sounds much better this way.
Well, hope you like it. I really liked the quote prompt. It was inspiring.

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  • voices
    July 30

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    To be totally honest, I would like to see the long version. Though I do conform to a strict moral code I do not feel suppressed, in fact I find freedom in living with the protection of gospel principals. Society has its own ideas of ethics, and morality. Those constraints can help to bring the cream to the top. The people in missouri soon saw what happened after they tried to supress the saints. The work went forward no matter how hard they tried to make things.

    Im not sure about using the colons. Not a big fan of using them in my work. But this is your piece and its your call of course. Even though the message here is clear. I get the feeling there is something missing, cant put my finger on it. I think its a good subject for a sonnet the length drawn out could bring some clearer images and texture. I hope YOU are satisfied with it because in the end thats all that matters.


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 31

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    Wow, superb write!
    Great job with this piece, I love the word usage here and the strong emotion.
    Bravo!!!


    ♥ Kate


  • BluesMan gold member
    March 28

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    Well deserving of the Gold.

    I feel like you ripped this from the mental soap box of nonconformity that I stand on when writing my poetry. I simply love this piece. Bravo fellow rebel.


  • Jocelyn.Jaded
    March 24

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    oh wow I love this! Completely made me think, alot of your poetry makes me think :]]. Really good poem.

  • ybarradf
    March 15

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    Kewl Thoughts

    Like it! I wouldn't be so hard on comformity though. lol. Some people don't desire to be different or express art at all. Some people want to be the same. I think we all do in some point in life or in some way. Not to mention that without the conformist, aritists inspiration and work would not be as powerful. Just some thoughts. Thank you for sharing!


    • DeadlyPoetic88
      March 16
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      Very true but the contest I wrote this for wanted harshness toward conformity


  • individuality gold member
    March 13

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    i think it is good having some rules like with form poetry for example for that teaches us but also i think we should let our spirits soar and gather the emotional aspects to throw into poetry, it is not all about laying down tracks for everyone to walk along.


  • falloutgirl1989
    March 13
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    i definately agree!!


  • Arkbear gold member
    March 7

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    VERY cool!

     

    Now I know why I added you as a FAV yesterday.....and why you are sitting on POW on my homepage......very clever work and pondering thoughts penned with voice and strength.....lovin your talent.....congrats on that Gold

     

    Bear -


  • Xianaria gold member
    March 7
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    Oh, I like this! Well done & best wishes in the contest!


  • light insight silver member
    March 7

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    Profound

    Amen to everything you have said. For it is a conformists society which slowly decays the heart beat of creativity. If not for the radical poets of the world we would all be robotic clones. Well written.

    Rhon


  • Dragonbabyx3
    March 7

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    A wonderful work (and inspiring quote as well!) Great work on this, as it really hit the nail on the head. *clappie* Wonderful Job!


  • Antipodi
    March 7
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    Woah That does it I'm throwing my chains away and stuff conformity ...nice one poet


  • Harlequin Dance
    March 6

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    "Yet staunchly, conformity,
    a toxin seeps into artistic veins" sounds odd. It sounds like it wants conformity to be another adverb, or for "a toxin" to be removed. It just sounds awkward to read as it is.

    I can't agree completely with your poem, although it was interesting to read. Sometimes the society we live in is the reason we have so much to express. I never really understand what people mean when they speak about "society's standards". It would be different if we were in a communist society, but the US is not. Do standards mean a certain standard of living, or a moral code that everyone holds by? Or is it just a standard as a belief in standard?

    Interesting poem, anyways

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