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Ordinary Rose

Missing image
Dried
red rose,
the cutting
and sad wilted
reminder of your
cruel broken promise to
respect our love and wait here.
Now death fills up my tattered heart,
as the choking smell of the rose seethes
like a corpse rotting in an unmarked grave.
Misplaced, alone and confused in anger,
I lay upon the freshly tilled dirt,
longing to smell you once again.
Soil and petals slip between
my dry brittle fingers
and mascara runs.
Dead long ago,
my one rose
laid to
rest.

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Title prompt: Ordinary Rose
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  • ladydp2000
    January 18

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    Just beautiful! Enjoyed this one too,the representation of the rose is a great metaphor of love in this Etheree I am finding it so, at least to me it is.Blessings.D.


  • NickelleteXninja
    March 10, 2009

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    first of all that hs always been one of my faav pics
    so good pick

    Wow I loved the way the poem was limed
    I love everything about it

    this was amazing
    thank you so much for this entry


  • drifting cloud silver member
    March 8, 2009
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    Very touching and skillfully done.


  • Zeprina-Jaz
    March 5, 2009

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    A brilliant use of a double etheree!! I love the picture and I love the form and above all I love the poem. There's a very powerful message here which is acheived through the innovate language and ideas. A great write!!