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“Dr. Awkward…”
“Dr. Awkward…”
Dammit.
(…I'm mad)
“I was drawn,
inward”
Never odd
or even
(…Never even…)
ii.
Lived as a devil.
“stole lots”
(Dumb mud…)
“Flesh saw…”
“Flesh saw…”
“Flesh saw…”
iii.
“Devil never even lived…”
iv.
(Wash self, Wash self, Wash self…)
“…Dumb mud”
(stole lots…)
“Lived as a devil”
Never even…
(Never odd
or even)
[Drawn inward saw I]
v.
Dammit.
“…I'm mad…”
(Dr. Awkward…
Dr. Awkward…)
Author notes
Option: Letter Palindrome Poem
(extra hard - worth an automatic 20 points added to your score)
I also thought the picture prompt fitting.
Prompts:
http://img246.imageshack.us/my.php?image=worldofthemushroomskg8.jpg
- Nickolds
The poem is in reference to how our conscious can drive us "mad"...the "mud" coating of those dirty things lurking in our subconscious that leaves us feeling uncomfortable and "awkward"- this is sorta a rant trying to convince oneself that those things never happened (hence the "wash self" to forget about the flesh)
I think I may be a lil "mad" myself after attempting this style of palindrome- the whole poem reads the same from the first word forward and the last word backwards... dr.awkward... dr.awkward...paging .dr.awkward...
A contest entry
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11458 points, ended March 22, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
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hmmm... maybe you should take my college course on background design... (maybe I should, too... hard to create one that is not gaudy) but then we all go through phases, especially the obsessively creative... a palindrome... palindrome... what is a palindrome... can't remember... let's see if I can figure it out just by reading your piece here... ah, where the line is spelled the same forward and backwards (what's his name wrote a song based on palindromes and sung it like Bob Dylan- it worked!) (Weird Al Yankovich) AH JOY JOY it's on Youtube- and he did a spoof on a Bob Dylan 60's music video! HURRAH! lol www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nej4xJe4Tdg
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ha, although I love pictures and backgrounds, the contest rule was for plain bg's and no pictures. Although, I could use such a class.
Yeah, true. My bg's have been a bit dull & bleak, mirroring my mood.
yeah this palindrome contest was a bit challenging because it went beyond just words reading the same forwards and backwards but the whole poem was to be one long palindrome.
you know me...usually I have to attempt such crazy challenges. -
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yes, I see it now- the overall palindrome... and the choices say much about the author, and by extension, human desires/nature... makes me want to try one... curiosity, you know...
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curious of course...
I will be interested to see where you head off to in such
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Hello and thanks for the entry (=
Wow!! This is amazing. Very impressive and original. I probably read it over like 20 times, I love it. I love your author notes too, thanks for leaving all that. Interesting.
I like how each stanza works with and against each other. Like with the devil thing, it's like an internal battle sprawled across a page. Thanks for taking the time with this (= here's my scoring sheet:
Conscious Never Sleeps Scoring Sheet
Correct Format - 15/15 points
Rules - 5/5 points
Clarity - 7/10 points
Cohesion - 9/10 points
Length - 10/10 points
Theme - 8/10 points
Originality of theme - 5/5 points
Title - 4/5 points
Vocabulary/Grammar - 4/5 points
Flow - 8/10 points
Personal Opinion - 15/15 points
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Do the 20points for attempting a palindrome apply?
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yep, we add it later. don't worry we won't forget.
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sorry to hear you are leaving. May I ask why?
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I'm not leaving anymore.
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want your points back?
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huh? no, why would i?
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sometimes when people plan on leaving this site they hold contest to give away their remaining points etc. Since I am not really in desire of points, I thought I would ask.
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Thanks. I like a good challenge from time to time and this was a challenge.
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This was beyond impressive. I think it was the longest palindrome I've ever seen, and I surely do feel like I've gone mad after reading this piece--it had that much of an impact. I can only imagine how you must feel after having written it!
Thanks for sharing this impressive write with us, and good luck in the contest! (Although I'm a fellow competitor, if I was judging this contest I think I'd pick you to win the big bounty!)
~Sparrow
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wow, I am totally and honestly taken aback by such a compliment.
Having such compliments means more to me than an actual trophy placing.
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