she despised the way he'd belch and blow it like a kiss
the way his cum, chunky on her tongue, tasted of sardine and salt
she had long ago tired of jose's casualties and had no regret sending the gull
on its final flight
into black hefty
fuck!
she laughed,
look how straight that ugly-ass bird flew
m
Author notes
slush.
no really, do me
Comments
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very MAC truck effect!
Your words say it all!!!!
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i have the rhetorical moments when I ask "what in the hell did he eat today?? and why does it keep happening...?!"
nice tinge of humor in this in the middle of vivid images that (I'm sure) had more than myself wanting to wade in those slush-lines. Another to the point / great poem by you.
Kim
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you should join our slushy group...
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i like the wrong way wings, for some reason. it's like a jose livingston seagull--anti-beauty, anti-perfection.
-bizzaroworldfish
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can i slush?
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lol
I really like the humor in this one -
love how he flew straight into the black hefty (nice detail)
my exhusband used to fart ..and it would stink so bad he'd chase us out of the room, once or twice he did it in my face, pissed me the fuck off, the dick. thank god he's an ex..
that's where this took me, hehehe
(i'll be editing that bit out
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i just found your comment.. do not edit it! it is perfect
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I was just reading some Jim Moore poems and was thinking how he creates such magical moments in tight controlled verse, then I read this and thought Mary does this too...
you are a wonderfully gifted writer, but I've probably told you that before
loved it
al
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This is juicy and delightfully metaphorically rare.
You slushies are like the special forces of AP for Christ sakes! LOL!
and weekend warriors like me can only dream. *sigh*
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I love it when you talk dirty
but this poor gull with backward feet, I don't know about the taste but I sure can't get this image outta my mind
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i just love how this came about and how it worked... and i love the Slush!!
this Mary... has that definite tongue in cheek touch!!
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You have such a unique vision. Every word seems honed to convey such precision. What a gift for picking up on such small details that convey whole personalities, characteristics. Quite simply amazing.
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*gag* -to the second line but awesome write
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lolol - this is different but SO good!
~ Nicolette
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I try to reserve the word 'brilliant' for really special occasions - like this.
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I love stuff like this.
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Gross! So good though, lol.
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Some antics...
one more shored up moratorium before another chip of the dick flies off, freeing up space in the grander cosmos of it all and putting some innocent bystander's eye out. nothing a simple eye patch can't fix, I imagine. at what point does the slush become funded and the frequency of use become inane, or does it? stacked with exactitude...
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Ya know...the best bit about a slushy is that they keep it real
So real that I must go use mouthwash to get rid of 'that' taste 
C
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This is disgusting and yet so well written that it is brilliant I loved the ending, and the title is so fitting and kickass in its' own right - stunning!
Polly
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lol!
I think my mom would like this...
What I know for sure though is that I do.
Excellent.
♣ Tegan
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c-caw! c-caw!
it flies a bit over me head
but it is a fascinating trip
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i really like this ... i love that "slush" shit
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it's a great group
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yes... then, it would fly right; maybe she needs to handle ...all of his things...
... This has such interaction...engrossing...the reader develops these people and relationship...PK
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i really think you kept only the best in this & it doesn't lose a thing. excellent & such a fun poem to read, lol, and i love that ending. [maybe take the first 'and' out in L2? - only a suggestion]
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yep. you are right!
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fuck! she laughed,
look how straight that ugly-ass bird flew
i fucking love this!
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