Historians marvel,
they've found an ancient computer.
It acts as a device of navigation,
yet peace stands forgotten.
News stories explain the discovery
of the bronze device,
yet in awe-strickening silence
the stifle whisper of peace unheard.
Forgotten.
As neighbors fight over whether
a symbol of peace is allowed to hang on a door.
The television blasts the new-found discovery.
So, for a moment the atrocity that disrupts
home-owner-association lives is quieted.
While archaeologists cling to their findings:
The ancient machine, learning how the
gears work and move.
What worth are researchers, when all they do
is dig up the past?
Can't they help solve the present's problems?
As we war against peace!
We war against terror!
And terrorists attack us!
What good are researchers?
Anthropologists would rather deal with the
sophisticated past than the corrupt present.
Death and dirt is easier to deal with than
common people trying to solve today's problems.
A peace symbol hanging on a
Christmas wreath on a
suburban Colorado front door.
Peace stands forgotten,
maybe it too will be dug up.
Author notes
This is one that has been up before but I edited it and like it much better now. It actually has a titled. This has been a work in progress for 4 years now. tell me what you think
A contest entry
- "TERRORISM" by rinzurajan.
800 points, ended March 17, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How was this one??
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Well people say that researchers are to help us with our future by digging up our past. But what good will it do because we really don't know what happened in our past. What we should actually be living for is our future. The past is that...the past and it should remain that. Remember what we did, learn from it and move on.
"As neighbors fight over whether
a symbol of peace is allowed to hang on a door.
The television blasts the new-found discovery.
So, for a moment the atrocity that disrupts
home-owner-association lives is quieted.
While archaeologists cling to their findings:
The ancient machine, learning how the
gears work and move.
What worth are researchers, when all they do
is dig up the past?
Can't they help solve the present's problems?
As we war against peace!
We war against terror!
And terrorists attack us!
What good are researchers?
Anthropologists would rather deal with the
sophisticated past than the corrupt present.
Death and dirt is easier to deal with than
common people trying to solve today's problems.
A peace symbol hanging on a
Christmas wreath on a
suburban Colorado front door."
I really enjoyed these stanzas. How true they really are. This is a great write. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it with us. -
I agree that we have to take from the past to improve the present and future, but the world seems to forget that. I liked reading this, I wanted to get to the end as fast as I could.
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I enjoyed the story line. Seemed nice and easy to read, and I sometimes find freewrite and prose a yawn. Yours was more interesting.
In contradiction to its message, we should learn from the past, and archeology might show us the way of correcting some of the grave mistakes of the nastiest little chimp predators on the planet?
Perhaps your present president will try to make a better example? We can only hope.
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Ew I am no fan of our current president.
This was written about researchers not looking for past problems that occur today to fix it is about the mundane things that can wait until later
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wow I am very impressed! I love "As we war against peace!
We war against terror!"
Those are very powerful lines. I like you add in the researchers and anthropologists. I was thinking of doing archaeaology/anthropology when i get to college but after thinking about it it seems like they are in their own little world of the past and your poem seems to capture that.
My favortie favortie part though is the last line. It really makes me think. War is so easy to dig up, bomb shells and guns and bullets are destruction are all so tangible. But what evidence is there of peace that will last 200 years? You make a really good point on how the world needs to create these tangible forms of peace, rather than war. -
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Im glad you liked it.
And I think youre the only one who got it
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very interesting!
I love the meaning behind it, and it's a very good visual. It's interesting to me that you look like my computer teacher from highschool and you happen to write about a computer... lol..
HOnestly, I think the flow of it makes it hard to read. I find that breaking it up on how you want it to be read helps the poem flow in a readers mind. But my opinion is that of one reader... heh
Love these lines "What worth are researchers, when all they do
is dig up the past?
Can't they help solve the present's problems?
As we war against peace!
We war against terror!"
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IM me with a link to a poem you want me to read
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How can I fix the flow??
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wow...this is awesome I like the line
"As neighbors fight over whether
a symbol of peace is allowed to hang on a door"
it's happened to me lol!
so this is really cool!! good job =)
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Glad you liked it. IM me with a link to a poem you want me to read
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it really doesn't matter which one..just look at my poems and which ever catches your fancy,....read... =)
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This is a great write, and I can tell a lot of thought was put into it. And I sort of agree with you. But you must also realize, that sometimes you can learn from the past. I think some should still do their research on the past and future, but just not as many perhaps.
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This poem is not about forgetting research its about forgetting what they should really be researching... the past isnt always important when the future crumbles
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a great flowing poem...and lot of clear messages cming out of it...
done really well...
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Very well written, flows nicleyu to, good luck in the contest and keep writting.
~ Chelsey♥
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This poem is great.
It sends out such a clear strong message, and the way you write creates such imagery.
A truely amazing poem and read.
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Thank you. I really appreciate the comment. I have re-worked this poem several times.
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This is a truly fantastic message, and so true. I agree with what you say here, this is one of a few faultless poems that i have seen. It's laid out well, reads well, and a fantastic message to go with it.
Although i have nothing against researchers or historians lol
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I actually dont have a problem with researchers either lol I actually love them. I wrote this in high school juxtaposing 2 articles
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i love how you put this together! very nice! i am just slightly confused on what exactly this "peace object" is. maybe you could enlighten the reader on that with more hints and descriptions. im sorry if i criticize too much, i dont want you to hate me i just want to help you. i find more criticizim i get, the happier i am than someone just telling me it was good.
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Lol I dont hate you. The object is actually a representation of mans constant hunt for technology and how everything else goes to the way side
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