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♥love this man, hate me♥

I love the man that i am with,
But this pain is horrid,
I hate myself,
I cannot find myself,
Yet i seem so happy all the time,
It a front,
It's a small facade,
If it works for school that's all i need,
Because at home i am a loner,
I just sit there and cry all night,
Not caring what my parents want,
I'm so sick of this selfishness,
With people wanting me to be something i'm not.

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  • SaraMaria
    March 9, 2009
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    I can totally relate to the situation your in. A good poem, i like the flow and meaning of it


    • ciara12
      March 10, 2009
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      thank you ever so much i am glad that you understand...
      thanks
      Love forever and always
      Ciara Ann


  • angel with a reason
    March 6, 2009

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    great job

    this is so emotional girl but i love it. you will be ok.everything will work itself out, just give it time. im always here for u if you need me

    • ciara12
      March 10, 2009
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      thanks leslee you are such a big help bff
      love forever and always
      Ciara Ann


  • Adelaine
    March 5, 2009

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    Claps.

    Very emotional...beautiful write! This piece is something most people can relate to.

    Keep writing,
    Adelaine


    • ciara12
      March 6, 2009
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      thank you so much.. it just has so much to do with my life and i'm just falling apart.... but i'll get better


  • goingnowherefast
    March 5, 2009
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    oh wow. this is amazing.

    • ciara12
      March 6, 2009
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      Thanks so much...
      love forever and always
      Ciara Ann


  • untouched pages
    March 5, 2009

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    These few lines hit me hard... it really hurts...

    I cannot find myself,
    Yet i seem so happy all the time,
    It a front,
    It's a small facade,

    that was me thro out most of my life.. and its hard to overcome!!! hugs my baby girl...


    • ciara12
      March 6, 2009
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      thank you so much i mean it was hard for me to live the life i didn't want to... and i am doing it again if it hit you hard then you know how hard it hit me when i wrote it...
      love you forever sis,
      Miss Ciara ann


  • couldbeworse
    March 5, 2009

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    But this pain is horrid,
    I hate myself,
    I cannot find myself,

    I can SO relate to this. I have such wonderful things and people in my life yet I am but a shell of myself. I hope things get better for you.


    • ciara12
      March 6, 2009
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      thank you so much and i'm glad that you can relate to it like everyone else should be able too!!!
      love forever and always
      Ciara Ann

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