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Gullible

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It's the same old story

you told to me

romantic at heart

you seem to be

 

Repetitious are your words

you tell to us all

gullible are we

to take the fall

 

No commitment from you

will we ever see

the romantic poet

must always be free

 

A hard lesson we learn

a hurt we all share

but you find another

and we find you nowhere

 

Sooner or later

there will be the one

that will break your heart

and cease your fun

 

 

Author notes

message to my lover, bound by a silver cord with golden threads, love/hate...time is the essence...unforgetable...

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  • morgana raven Greeters member
    March 23

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    This feeling I think many can relate to in a lot of ways, very well put across.
    Thank you for entering
    Laura.


  • penman gold member
    March 15
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 14

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    Ah..how beautifully and truthfully you revealed the fact of the life..and the last srtanza of the poems is really a thought pvoking as well..thanks for sharing..


  • sense surreal gold member
    March 8
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    ouchie Anna Lee


  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    March 6

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    A very tight piece that contains and quickly tells a complete tale; and while it feels old, it could very well be a present day metaphor of many a player on this site.
    Very impressive.

    ken


  • LittleMoon silver member
    March 6
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    Another very well thought out piece, with a bit of a difference. Sheila


  • Beret55 silver member
    March 6
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    Very good, and true in a lot of cases. Good rhyme and rythem..


  • arafura gold member
    March 5
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    Great work!

  • Liquid memories
    March 5

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    Ahhhhhhhh so true. You do reap what you sow.
    If we do badness to others, it will find us no matter where we go, or try to hide. lol. I like this.

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