It’s arduous
breaking ritual,
or rousing one’s mind
to possibilities -
possibly disappointing
to those that shared
my shopping cart
and kept warm
in the underbrush
while chilly winds
blew about town.
but money talks -
so I’m walking
Springtime is about change
please wait while I shower ...
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Author notes
Tabula Rasa - noun: an opportunity to start over without prejudice
Word count: 46
A contest entry
- Write your way out of a paper bag by voices.
1750 points, ended March 19, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All comments are appreciated / answer in kind!
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I got to know "starting over" on a first name basis. After some awfully akward moments I learned "self pity" and "tabula rasa" are mortal enemies. It always helps to have friends who can help share the burden of loneliness in verse. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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You have ventured beyond your poetic "comfort zone" with this, Joy - and very successfully, I might add!
Excellent contemporary free verse and the content is life-affirming with its advocation of the possibility of change.
I'm impressed.
Bill
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Outstanding title, thank you for the translation in your AN. First stanza has a heaviness captured by your word choices, "arduous", "ritual", and "rousing one's mind." All difficult things to overcome.
Outstanding "Springtime is about change." Followed softly by a spring shower...
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i liked it alot.... it is difficult to break out of old habits.... (i'm taking that is what the "old rituals" means)
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You stepped outside of the brown bag alright with this piece And if i may say did a grand job of doing so. How does one limit their work to a given number of words And still make it enjoyable I don't know but you have managed it Well done good luck in the contest
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