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your bedsheets are begining to smell a lot like her.



I can hear her heart beating against these walls,

banging against my heart - [tearing up my world].

I tried so hard to be that special girl, the pretty one -

I put on lipstick, wore a short skirt and lost the curves,

but you still wont love me like you said you did before.

I miss the way you kiss me and sail your hands down my spine,

tickling my ribcage with romantic gestures only you could make.

Those days were like cheese and ham,

they weave perfectly together I can't understand,

why your heart now beats for her?

I know it sounds pathetic, but I hope deep down

that you're using her like I think you used me,

so at least I wont be the only one.

Perhaps she'll hurt you and you'll look at me

and think about daisy dreams, our pickered fence

will finally come in view--I'll paint it blue for you,

it's still your favourite colour darling.

But I know her eyes are the shade you love too.

Just standing here, I can smell her on you

even though you aren't here, your words hit me

as if you threw a blow beneath my ear -

I am cut, by all the things you've ever done

and you hurt me completely, but I still adore you

and I don't know why I've ever done that for.

The first love, always love - I hoped so hard

that those words the wise ones waved around,

weren't true; but I just want to get over you.

This isn't right, but I want you -

what's a shattered girl to do?

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I hate my ex but in many ways I love him as he's my first love and always will care for him although I'm ashamed of it as he's done some real dreadful things. I hope this is okay, I know it's terrible.

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  • wow, this is amazing. i loved every word. thank you for entering this...i think this is exactly what i needed to read.♥


  • I can hear her heart beating against these walls,
    banging against my heart
    -this is such a eye stealing start. It gives such an omni-present feel.

    sail your hands down my spine
    -Oh god, what imagery.

    I know it sounds pathetic, but I hope deep down
    that you're using her like I think you used me,
    -Aah, love this part!! i cant relate soo much.

    But I know her eyes are the shade you love too.
    -This poem just keeps getting better and better!


    FINALIST!

  • Nice job. There are a few typos, but this a a great poem. I liked this line the most:

    Just standing hear, I can smell her on you

    Mike

  • Wow this is truly... AMAZING. You did a graet job with the prompt.

  • Yes, of course=]

    Title:
    "Your bedsheets are starting to smell a lot like her."

    Quote:
    "So wave goodbye to a time you once believed was everything."

    I can't wait to read your entry; I hope my prompts suffice:/

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