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The Hand

    The Mother's hand, so gentle but firm
    The Baby's hand, soft eager to learn
    The Father's hand, strong and kind
    The Grandmother's hand, ready to mind
    The Grandfather's hand, gnarled yet strong
    The Teenager's hand, could do wrong
    A hand put out in greeting
    A hand held tight with fear
    A hand  made fist for a beating
    A hand that will wipe a tear
    The Hand of God, the Hand of Fate
    Clasp a dear one's  hand before too late

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  • nungsang.jamir
    April 7, 2009
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    Ham......Wow...

    Transitional verses between faith and reality of life, keeping the materials at high Lope


  • DesolatELifE
    March 9, 2009

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    Very good. Reminds me of a song I used to like very much. Thanks for that. It's nice to be reminded of good things.


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    March 6, 2009
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    WOW

    What a wonderful piece. A littany of hands crafted into an excellent poem. As I read this I was compelled to put Grandma's Hands by Bill Withers on the speaker. http://www.ilike.com/artist/Bill+Withers/track/Grandma's+Hands
    They seem to belong together as my two hands which are now clapping you.
    Jim

  • Black-Fang
    March 5, 2009

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    This is a very interesting concept great form too and a great ending
    please credit the author of the pic in your ANs

    thanks for entering