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Dormant is my desire

a faint pulse

glimpsed in repose

 

This silent yearning

now exposed

 

Grasp emotion

to aching breast

 

the rise and fall

a rhythm of need

 

I plead -

 

answer come

in your silhouette

 

casting shadow

over skin

to capture us

in beautiful sin

 

Find me in wait

within the night

 

and rouse craving

to a sensual chorus

 

of mingled breaths

and tangled limbs

 

Stay with me

a moment

 

till this longing

finally dims

 

 

 

 

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  • awannabepoet
    September 10

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    And how sweet is the night that it may fill all those desires, flesh pressed to flesh and the passion consumes the moment.

    I like it, I like ti so!
    awannabpoet


  • aboomer silver member
    September 8

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    Well, for just popping into your head - great job!
    Well done on the images, emotion and depth in this.


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 7

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    excellent

    loved this one...you had so much in here that I was caught gasping with meaning,tonens of it.These lines I loved:

    This silent yearning

    now exposed



    Grasp emotion

    to aching breast

    Could ya visit me and comment on my latest ones


  • sweet arrival gold member
    September 3

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    the rhyme in this wasn't hard hitting, which makes it so nice in that regard, but the first stanza to me had me already pulled in to read more. it all was wonderful.


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      September 3
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      Thank you I rarely rhyme these days so am always a bit iffy about doing it lol. Glad it was subtle.

  • Bob Fox
    August 15

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    POET

    A beautiful sin. Is it not strange how forbidden love can be wonderful and exciting. For gone are the mechanical moves replaced by the wonders of the new and dripping with a sensual lust.. A salacious piece of poetry.


  • SteveS gold member
    August 5

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    You said this "just popped into your head?!" The first stanza the way it sets up "his notice" is a killer. "answer come

    in your silhouette"

    I see a dark room with a lighter hallway, the man without a face answers your silent signals. Super write.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    August 4
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    Very sensual and relateable. Enjoyable read to say the least.


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    July 6
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    Awesome writing here kiwi!!!


  • white stone
    July 1

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    Nice... a very rhythmic write that fills up the senses. Efficient rhyming without overdoing it.


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 24

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    This is so lovely ... The way you combine imagery and depth, to that very essence of longing - is simply beautiful. Great write!

  • graydeth
    June 18

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    To be honest I came to your page based on your pic from the contest "We were...". I'm so glad I did. This is a truly beautiful write. Rather than repeat what so many have already said here, I'll just say that I plan on spending a lot of time reading your writing here. If the rest are anywhere near this one, as it appears from all your fans' comments, it will be an enjoyable day for me. Thanks for sharing.


  • Heath Thompson
    June 5
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    Hello Jacks - this works for me especially the final four lines - well done!


  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 4

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    A beautiful and sweet write. This has such a soft sensual feeling from start to finish. Absolutley breath taking. Thanks for sharing.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    March 15

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    You write these sensual jewels so wonderfully! I am always breathless with your tender passionate visions...most lovely Sis!

    Love~


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      March 15
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      Aw thanks Sis! Coming from a master sensual writer such as yourself, that is a huge compliment!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 12

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    Saucy! Love the wanton imagery portrayed, a beautiful piece of passion, superbly penned as ever! Your talent shines hunni!


  • Amera gold member
    March 11

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    Love it! You have an amazing ability of penning deep emotion in to abstract writing yet making it easy to understand. This is true talent.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    March 10

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    Awesome...

    Love where you went this...
    Soft, sensual yearning, building to tender climax that made for an enthralling read...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • juanita032001
    March 10
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    wonderful write

    a very sensual write i loved every line, and the imagination wow.....thankyou for sharing.....


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 7

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    Very beautiful as is everything that you
    write here sis! Brilliant take on this picture.
    All the best to you and thanks for sharing
    your talent with us all here!




    Jeremy0826


  • Fourshadesofblue
    March 7

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    A captive visualization of desire. Well written with depth, wisdom and personal self expression.

    Sex is the rollercoaster we all like to ride,
    Desire is the engine that makes it drive.
    Lust is the fury that makes us hurry,
    But love is the emotion that drives us wild.

    I'm not one who normally comments on poems , but this piece impressed me . Thanks for sharing !


  • runewalker
    March 6

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    Jax, been thinking of you:

    Dormant is … a faint pulse
    Glimpsed … silent yearning...
    rhythm of need … I plead -
    casting shadow … to capture us...
    … wait … within the night...
    craving …. sensual chorus...
    mingled breaths … tangled limbs...
    Stay… a moment...
    …longing finally dims.


    your poems have their reach. the spaces between your words punctuate postulates.

    D


  • PerVirtuous
    March 6

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    Damn. Whatever you got, I'd like to know where they sell it! I try to write like this and it comes out sugar-coated crap. You are able to blow clouds into the sky. Such a tender and gentle nature underscored by raw passions... a very delicate trick! Always amazed, but never surprised. You seem to do it every time.


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      March 6

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      Gosh, thanks Allan, I am humbled by your comment, and you could never write sugar-coated crap!


  • motel silver member
    March 6

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    there is such a warmth and gentleness to this piece ... a caress.
    also, title is wonderful.
    thanks.


  • Angelflower
    March 6

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    What a wonderful display of sensuality.. It's been a while but it seems your muse has truly come back? .. thanks for sharing.

    Angel


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 5
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    Don't think it ever dims. I love the soft sensuality.

    Buddy


  • DolceVito gold member
    March 5

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    Woohooo! The muse is back...Love it, love it much...I'd stay till it dims. Beautifully expressed sensual.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 5

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    sighs....

    this is so lovely mia cugina...
    absolutely beautifully wonderfully wonderful
    i can't even settle on a favorite part, i just love the structure and flow of it all -

    Love light & laughter
    TAsha


  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 5

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    I love the lines "a rhythm of need // I plead -" - they just work so well together and make the reader stop and savour them I really like the way that you write in such a beautifully sensual way without ever crossing that line into cringe territory - you paint delicate blushes with your words!



    Polly


  • Denierim
    March 5

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    Just popped into your head? I want to be able to make a masterpiece like this just by getting it in my head... lol

    This is a very beautiful and very sensual piece filled with so vivid emotions. Extremely beautiful work, love it.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    March 5

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    For random thoughts, this is a very excellent poem..loved the flow of it and just made the reader feel the anticipation of the poet in waiting, yearning...:g

  • aboomer silver member
    March 5
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    well, for thoughts that just popped into your head - WOW! Great depth, emotion, tenderness....softly romantic.
    Excellent!


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 5

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    This is a really captivating read. It locks in the readers attention and you just have to keep reading. it also flows very well. awesome write!!!!

    -deadly


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    March 5

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    My friend

    I miss reading your poems. This one is so well done. Very emotional and sensual. Well written and leaves you with a sense of longing. Great job my friend, Mark

  • TonyT
    March 5

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    Many of the best things lie dormant for a spell
    waiting for just the right conditions that finally make
    them blossom and become that beauty which they were
    meant to be in the first place...

    Tony


  • miyabichan1991
    March 5
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    that was amazing. keep it up.

  • Amera gold member
    March 5
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    Nothing makes a reader sigh deeper than a physically sensual poem penned with emotion. "you lil hussie, you"

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Lady Michaella
    March 5

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    fantastic poem.. very well written indeed... brilliant take on that picture.. original and a lovely read
    xx


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    March 5

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    I have to leave but a sigh because there is nothing else to describe this, when you know where to get some of this from, let your sis know Beautiful to see your words gracing my empty pages sweetheart. Best to you


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 5

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    Oooooooooooo this is pure poetry. Just beautifiul. You are such an amazing poetess
    Gaylene

  • A-muse-in-writer
    March 5

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    Beautiful

    A marvelous sensual write, enjoyed it very much as you speak so eloquently but without a cost to the emotion and desire which is aptly displayed. Well done.


  • stompsalot
    March 5

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    awesome! kudos my friend! your talent is always astounding! never boring and always just enough different, but just enough the same to make it you.
    love your work, your talent.
    blessings *stomsp


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    March 5
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    I Love your writes and poems

    they are so feather lights and land gently on ones heart to receive fully! beautiful my Angel as always, and The medley from solo wisp was a perfect chaser,

    this will be feature tomorrow in Today's Poems
    Heavenly sinful love it!

    love ya Sis

    Rend

    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      March 5
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      Thank you so much sweetheart! And yes, Solo Wisps was the perfect chaser indeed! Tell him to post it!

      Love you ♥


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    March 5

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    beautiful, sad, and wanting ... I decided to springboard from what popped in your head My Kiwi Queen. You've always an intimate feel, whether you brings us pleasure, escape, pain, or peace.



    s~w


    Unedited, took about 3 minutes:


    Fires burnt, seep smoke,
    slight taste fades

    in unison.

    This ego regrouped,
    slipped, stripped

    within regressions arms,

    empty.


    Our juxtapose-

    the silky ray beams
    from brisk moon,

    refocuses within two,
    shared as one

    until sun kisses neck
    of the horizon

    and sighs breed separate breaths

    four eyes apart.

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      March 5
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      for a Poet to write such a write in 3 minutes

      says alot, this is beautiful! please do us all a favor
      and post your poem. and what an inspiration from Your Little kiwi Queen write for you to produce such a piece.

      Blessings

      Rend

      • Solo Wisp gold member
        March 5
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        I have posted ... I am hesitant to post these from IM or replies, as Jacks knows ... heh. Most times I need a push and looks like she recruited some help. heh

        s~w


        • Rend the Veil gold member
          March 5

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          well here's a push !

          its a beautiful piece ! and I believe the two were made for each other!

          Blessings

          Rend

          • Solo Wisp gold member
            March 5
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            Thanks .. I'm happy to add some more color to the wheel of Jack's poem. She's sensational, so is her talent.


            • Rend the Veil gold member
              March 5
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              your welcome!

              I love her writes and poems, I am a fan like she said though
              your talented

              R


      • kiwigirljacks gold member
        March 5
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        Yes.. it says a lot doesn't it, and he is a wonderful talent here on AP


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      March 5
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      Wow.. you must post that!! It's beautiful!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 5

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    Silent yearning sometimes can eat at ya unless you do something. So if it is 'someone' you yearn for, tell them, the worst that could happen is they refuse you, or, they just may tell you they feel the same.

    Powerful write Jackie.

    With much love,
    mj.


  • notorious
    March 5

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    Oh crap this poem reminds me that I need to shower (not because I smell like ass or because I have one, but because I planned to take one before midnight today).

    "This silent yearning
    now exposed"
    Could be anything - I love the ambivalence.

    "casting shadow
    over skin
    to capture us
    in beautiful sin"
    HUZZAH. "beautiful sin" just looks so good together.

    ;
    Jessica


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    March 5

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    yea pssssh popped into ur head...im suurrrrr HAHA

    well no need to tell you that u hav once again graced us with ur talent hehe

    you'll always b the queen of sensual (is that a good thing? hehe)

    hi 5!


  • Cannonsfire
    March 5

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    It's very beautiful and softly sad SIL, your muse is still there C


  • thejollytinker
    March 5
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    If it takes forever, doll. I suggest you use one of Michael!! You know where to look, pearl!!

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