wear it,tear it
membranes thick
with time,
stained with meconium
peeling skin,
and fear
crawl out of that womb
old man
live.
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Stunning
Aiyana! I wish to heaven I were your next door neighbor! I want to know you so I can understand how these perfect words come out of your head. You have an amazing edge in your voice, a strength I need to borrow. This is gorgeous. Come over for some wine and talk to me!
Love,
Camille
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I wish we were neighbors! i want to try on all your clothes and you mine as well as your poetry and you mine lol we will drink wine and sweet tea. be children again.. you have any hats?
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but why must you always make it so damn difficult to read with all the distractions and such?
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I have no idea it is as if someone is forcing themselves out of the womb out into the light...where are your glasses mine are perched upon my nose reading these lol.
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i do wear glasses but don't tell cause
i never wear them in pictures -
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me either your so vain... so am I
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just need them for driving but
sometimes when I pick up
the next morning
i wish I had worn then
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Hard sometimes to crawl out of the womb of fear you mention. Great imagery here.
Enjoyed your write.
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Awesome...
Again with the imagery (love it) & for such a short piece it is impressive work...
And kudos for the word meconium, I've never heard it before but it rolls off the tongue wonderfully...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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very interesting, I love it--its a strong short piece--some of poetry's best works, when they're short but jam packed with meaning.
loved it
Rachelle
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Got it. Feel it. Good write.
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thank you =)
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I feel this is about life, trust, and fears....how some us build a wall around ourselves.....sometimes one needs to just let there hair down......and have fun........beautiful metaphors.........Novy
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at first it seems to be about skin, thick skin but do you mean aging skin, is that where the old man comes in? It is a bit confusing, but it's also nice and short and choppy. If you could just make it clearer.
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Sorry to say I just didn't get this one, my loss? By the way, on a personal note, my eyes are not what they were (glaucoma and other nasties) so screen shots are critical. Your pale blueish lilacish on white is virtually invisible. Be kind and just use black on white maybe?
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Great thought for this prompt my friend.
It's great to read you once again!
I wish you all the best in this contest.
Take care and thanks for sharing it!
Jeremy0826
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