You are already all
you've longed to be
close your eyes and breathe
trust in the rhythm of inspiration
The work is done
all that remains now
is the clear crisp waters of faith
on your sapling words
They sprouted when your soul was new
in dark brown soils where
confusion percolated down to nourish
tiny roots of sentience
Blind to all knowing they pushed
cracked open the earth and spread
tremulous shoots
glittering themes of light
What could be eons passed
bending with the sun
singing out to stars perhaps
long since vanished
All unwitting you kept
your garden safe from saws
that would plane your understanding
into signposts and billboards
A garden not unlike perhaps
the long ago Eden that once
rustled softly in morning winds
yearning to the step of creation
Now open your eyes
and behold strong green sprays
swaying over streams of time
they were always there
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i really like this pice it speaks to me thanks for sharing ur wrighting
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My pleasure. Glad you enjoyed.
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Amazing! Love this beautiful, wonderful piece! Real Great work right here. Thankyou for sharing this piece.
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My pleasure. Glad you liked.
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great write, i liked it and will be back to read more soon,
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At first for some reason i saw the wind. Then I began seeing a small plant then a tree.
"All unwitting you kept
your garden safe from saws"
I loved that line. It seemed to me as if it was a guardian watching out for things. Very beautiful and gave me a comforting feeling.
"swaying over streams of time"
That was a good line to. I liked how you made it go along with the others. I cant explain it but this is great!
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I believe we each have a creative spirit, and that our life experiences nurture and grow that spirit without our necessarily realizing it. This poem is about the discovery of that spirit, the realization that it was already there, and the acceptance of this spirit was what really matters.
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beautiful
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I like the idea of already having become that which we want to be. I agree totally, we are only veiled in this life.
I felt understanding and contentment as I read this. Almost everything you write overwhelms me with peace.
I saw myself in "Eden"... spraying green.
(please join my invite contest
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Sorry I never joined the contest. That was some time back now.
It was over two years ago that Kevin's endless fooling around with this site finally drove me into the shadows. The unpredictability of Kevin's "upgrades" made me crazy, and I haven't participated much for quite some time beyond just using AllPoetry as a sort of portfolio for my poetry. A convenient place to stow my work so I'm able to access, review, and showcase it from anywhere.
It seems to me that you saw well into this poem to have felt it so deeply. This is good. My hope in life is to really grasp what inspired this poem and to live each day, hour, and minute by it for the rest of my days.
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Inspiring
Some very clever and inspiring imagery creating a nice
metaphoric compilation, thoroughly enjoyable I liked it very much...George...
p.s. don't change a thing
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Haven't been able to think of any way to change this for the better anyway.
Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for the kudos!
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its gental and flows good I like it
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Thank you. Glad you like.
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Great
I love the gentle peace of this poem. it flows together so nicely. You use good sensory language, imagery, and personification. I think you should use some form of punctuation to help the reader understand when to pause. Maybe not in every line, but at the end of each stanza. My favorite line is the first line "Trust in the rhythm of inspiration." Beautiful! -
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Ah yes, that's a good line. If you explore my writing to more depth, you'll find that some of my poems use prosaic punctuation, while others use none, and still others use only minimal or some variation of punctuation. I try to let the poems decide what they want.
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Great
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Again, thanks! This was a special sort of write, too.
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Excellent
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Glad you liked.
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i know where to come to read
outstanding verse. you are one
to be reckoned with...this is wonderful.
love, lane
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And here's hoping you do. Thanks, Dalaney.
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Well Done:
Very well done.
And very deep.
Good job.
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Thankee thankee.
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Once again you have unleashed the beauty of simplicity and imagery, bringing forth a creation that not only intrigues the soul but it sends out a call of tranquility after the struggle.
Your current face picture is very beautiful and so suited for this piece of art. The web of creation was first woven by the spiders ( according to mythology)
thank you for this beautiful symmetry of wording.
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Ooh I have a good poem for the spider image. It's called "Dis-integration". Maybe I should link to it from my main page.
Thanks for reading, and for your thoughts and enjoyment.
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bravo
wow, this is awesome! the imagery, the form, the flow! simply flawless... great great talent you have! hmmm, i a m somewhat mesmerized by your genius. bravo, my friend. great work. thanks for sharing your very talented writes!
blessings *sto9mps
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mesmerized by my genius?
woo you sure know how to swell a guy's ego.
quite glad you enjoyed!
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Excellent!
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Yay!
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