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Ringmaster

Off early in the morning
Can be really quite boring
To get people without interest
My inner most thoughts are getting grotesque

People who don't pay attention
To everyone else's situation
Are they nosy or polite
I'm really quite contrite

I'm becoming the juggler at the circus
Things are not bliss
Throwing overything up and over
Piling higher and higher

What I say in your face
Is not always the case
What is true is held way down deep
Blocking me from sleep

My face painted up like a Circus Clown
So nobody can see my frown
Does anybody notice my failings
Will I stop having these short lived flings

The lion tamer's troubles are measly
Hiding from close friends is not so easy
Emotions can't be whipped and restrained
Unless you ge lobotomized

With this I beg the writers block return
As my emotions start to burn
This piece is finished
As my will to write is diminished

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  • rainboots
    September 15
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    I thought the basic idea for this was wonderful. The rhyming came off cheesy to me but not a bad write. Thanks for entering.


  • skilter
    August 30
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    i liked this! thank you for entering!


  • K-a-r-s
    August 28

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    I like this poem very nice job.


    My favorite part is:

    People who don't pay attention
    To everyone else's situation
    Are they nosy or polite
    I'm really quite contrite

    I'm becoming the juggler at the circus
    Things are not bliss
    Throwing overything up and over
    Piling higher and higher

    What I say in your face
    Is not always the case
    What is true is held way down deep
    Blocking me from sleep


    But should the first line of the first stanza i copied into this comment be People who pay attention. Because you wouldn't be asking the question Are they nosy or polite if the people weren't paying attention lol. and In the 3rd line of the second stanza i copied it should be everything instead of oerything. But this is a very nice poem. Great job. And Good Luck In The Contest!!!!!!


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    March 25
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    I like the imagery that you use during the write. Reminiscent of "Painted Smile" by Raymond Lodge. It is alway a constant battle over whether or not to care, and if you do how much to show it. Many of us wear masks, the question is, are we hiding from others or ourselves?


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 18

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    Interesting write. I enjoyed the read a great deal! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    March 5

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    hahaha when i saw the title i thought of brittney spears. But your poem was more inspiring than her songs. Good write
    Rose

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