Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

True Love

leading a life of crime had left many scars
as he looked out at her from between bars
he had promised her fame, money and furs
and never to leave or cheat on her

so she swore to the judge he was as innocent
as a new born babe
honestly judge, he might steal  but kill, no way...
it  must have been his partner Abe

when the trial was over he knew, never again would he be free
he had given up all chances to cop a plea
the jurors had broke the testimony down to the bare bones
and as the verdict was given she let out a groan

now she would spend the rest of her life
looking at her love between bars
cause a life of crime leaves too many scars

she stood by his side his little turtle dove
he was the only person she had ever given her love

Darlene Sperber
March 4, 2009

Author notes

I chose option # 2 http://allpoetry.com/poem/5020275 ...my">http://allpoetry.com/poem/5020275...my 8 words are...Steal..Bone...free...cheat...scars...crime...turtle...innocent

In a list

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    March 15
    Edit | Reply
    hahaha isn't it sad....your one and only love behind bars.....isn't it true when love is involved we never wanna see the mistakes from our partners...

    Only hoping he told you where the money was hidden.....and I will tell you where I am..
    Like this rewrite too....you've done it again...
    XXJeannette


  • catz Moderators member
    March 5

    Edit | Reply
    Great, Sis. I mean it... this poem is so funny and written with very good use of the words you chose from the other poem. How do you get mixed up with these deadbeats, anyhow. I think Yem has the right idea... all of our loves should be money makers (either literally or figuralivly speaking)

    Good luck in the contest

    love and
    Dee


  • Yemassee gold member
    March 5

    Edit | Reply
    Thank goodness justice is blind. It's better to look at love behind bars than to actually live with it and find out the truth. Hopefully he got the chair. She would find someone better, maybe a crook who printed money.

    If I'm marrying a criminal, she's gonna be in the money making game.


    • J aime Coudre silver member
      March 5
      Edit | Reply
      Hey yem,

      thanks for reading my silly little entry...One of these days I am going to have time write something memorable...or not!...have a good one and stay warm...Spring is on it's way...