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here comes the rain again

 

Jaded heartstrings,

playing my fight song.

If only my pieces would shatter,

than I would have a reason to come back together.

But instead I walk through shame and pointed fingers.

 

I bathe in the downpour of dissapointment.

After all, I know I can never make you proud.

Get a good look at this face, I was a mistake from the get-go.

[I've heard those words, over and over]

 

Even when I try to stand up straight and walk away,

I just fall right over. [your glare pushes me over, your intent keeps me there]

When I try to speak a word, you shut my lips and downplay your lack of innocence.

 

As I drown in all of this...

 

 

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  • written-in-ink
    April 10, 2009

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    When I try to speak a word, you shut my lips and downplay your lack of innocence.
    ------------
    wow
    this is sad and so intense
    im sorry
    wow

    please feel beter
    but i ned you to know thisis tragic and amazing


  • penman gold member
    March 18, 2009
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    excellent

    Oh my what powerful emotions. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Nam
    March 18, 2009
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    Melancholy. A nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • JulietteArielle
    March 6, 2009

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    i like this. it's interesting and different. i can realate to most of these emotions portrayed here. good luck and thanks for entering


  • Silent Emotions
    March 5, 2009

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    oOo wow. This is utterly impeccable.

    "I bathe in the downpour of dissapointment." <--- my favorite line! Its such a strong, powerful metaphor.

    I know Ive said this before, but I really like how you think outside the box. You turn something as simple as this title into something so much more.

    I have to say I'm in complete awe.


  • Broken Vow
    March 5, 2009

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    wow. great job here.
    "If only my pieces would shatter,
    than I would have a reason to come back together."
    probly my favorite line. seems to be my life at the moment. good luck in the contest though you never need it.


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 5, 2009

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    So, you have to be one of my truly favorite poets. you write so well and your word choice is always impeccable. I wonder how you pick out your words.
    Well anyway this poem was well written. Good luck in that contest.

    -deadly


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      March 5, 2009
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      Why thank you. I am honored.

      There's no real "method to my madness", I just try to capture emotion in the most real way possible using imagery and that is vivid and, at times, moving. While at the same time, trying not to be cliche.

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