Skin soft as velvet petals of a wild rose,
Well rounded curves of voluptuous desire
Modestly attired in fashionable clothes;
This gentle goddess has lit my soul afire.
My admiration for her could not be higher,
She is full of goodness and is pure of heart.
Her love is the purpose to which I aspire,
It is what sets all other women apart.
I talk to the moon hoping it will impart
The wisdom and understanding that I need
To steadily follow the course that I now chart.
Oh, how I wish that the outcome was guaranteed.
Until that long awaited tomorrow is nigh
I ponder my sweet rose and await her reply.
~ for Stef ~
Author notes
This is my attempt at a Spenserian sonnet. abab bcbc cdcd ee rhyme scheme.
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A contest entry
- GIVE ME YOUR BEST by Mila7.
600 points, ended March 24, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Gently spoken words of devotion...
What a lovely Sonnet and though I am not an expert on forms ...I do know what is Beautiful and this Sonnet Sir is Divinely So. All the Best to You and Stef.
Sincerely Your Friend,
Cheryl
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I am not a expert on forms either. I googled the form and got bad directions. So, don't use this one as an example. It came out as a nice poem, but not a very good sonnet.
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Who makes up those rules Mike?
Where are the real standards? England... I would suppose - A group or club? Very interesting how one word can make it wrong directions. All in all a fine writing it is kind sir - and Stef liked it ...that makes it Gold.
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Yes there are rules to form poetry. A sonnet is particular form. I find it a challenge to write a piece of poetry that it is good and adheres to the strict form. I rarely write that type of poetry, but when I do I try to follow the rules as best I can.
Like I said .... good poem, not so good sonnet. It gives me something to strive for.
Mike
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Awwww my friend who could resist such words given, you have done wonderfully well with this even tho I know nothing about the form I do know what I enjoy and this piece is very enjoyable and melty
Ticks all the boxes
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting on my work. I missed a little on the sonnet style but managed to pull off a nice poem in spite of myself. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
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Bravo!
Very good sonnet. It sounded sweet. I loved the poem. It sounded pretty, and I loved how it flowed and I loved the ending especially.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting on my work. It is much appreciated. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. This one was meant to be special.
Mike
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I think you did a great job. Don't know how they come up with all these names afterall. What does it matter as long as it comes straight from the heart, as this one certainly does.
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The website that I went to for the directions gave me the name and the forms. I use them occasionally to infuse some discipline into my work. I am glad you liked this. Stef did too.
Mike
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I say, good work for a first attempt! these things can be hard. . .
I did notice that all the lines are one syllable longer than usual - eleven, instead of the required ten - but the sweetness and feeling are so good, I don't know if it matters too much. . .I suppose it does. . .but 'tis a right fair beginning, poet. . .
♠ Lady Elinor
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I looked up sonnets on line. The directions said 10-12 syllables per line. Eleven worked for what I was writing. They were all supposed to be 11. I will have to look into a better set of directions. I appreciate you taking the time to point these issues out. I know the sonnet is a well respected poetry form and I want to get better at it.
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Ah, I see. I think the info you got was not entirely correct. I've always read that they must be 10 syllables per line and iambic pentameter (I think, for all sonnets. . .) Hmmmm. Maybe I'm just an Old Poet who tends to abide by strict rules. . .
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Wow what a beautiful dedication to a wonderfully beautiful flower your description and use of verse is well put together the imagery is vivid and the flow is fine ...good one poet
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Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you kind words and the applause.
Mike
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ahh, really nicely done, full of emotion and beautiful imagery. you really outdid yourself with this poem. I loved the word choice for the rhyming too; brilliantly done. I would have never thought about rhyming "rose" with "clothes", to be completley honest >.<
keep up the amazing work, i look forward to reading more from you soon =]
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Thank you for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. It was my first attempt at a sonnet.
Mike
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Wow such a nyc sonnet (:
I Really like itt.. Keep it upp
Suzann x
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the sonnet.
Mike
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B-U-Tee-Ful
p.s. WHO says "woo" anymore, Mike?
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I am glad you enjoyed this poem. You inspired my first sonnet. As for the word 'woo', I was just down south in Kentucky. I thought that is how people down your way talked.
Woo who?
Why, you!
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this was very lovely... i found it to be modestly beautiful... i'm not good at sonnets, actually i've never written a sonnet before so i totally applaud you for your attempt. good luck in the contest. kahy
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Thank you very much. I have never intentionally written a sonnet. A while back I got a comment that one of my poems was a 'well written sonnet' so I decided to look up the form and see what I could do with it. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
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Hahahaha always your best Mike =)
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
Mike
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This is a beautifully crafted sonnet and I doubt there is a woman alive who could resist the romantic mood you have created.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I am attempting to woo her. I just hope that I am better at it than I am at fishing. Glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
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