Nothing tangibly
comes to the forefront
as intentions become lost in multiple definitions
and complex conjugations
(Maybe my accent is too thick)
Complicating the clarity of each utterance
Into a streamline of syllables
And childish gibberish
Causing individuals to remain as perplexed
as a blind man trying to decipher colors
through the imprints of his fingers
there is probably a patented term for this condition
that offers a pacifying explanation
like everything else
down to hypersensitive narcissism tendencies
which is just another translation for being abnormal
and yet
everything around me rapidly grows cold
What did you think
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Muy bueno! Don't you know abnormal IS the new normal? Glad to see you left me a pile o stuff to read after my absence.
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your comments have been missed along with the occasional convos.
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"Complicating the clarity of each utterance
Into a streamline of syllables
And childish gibberish
Causing individuals to remain as perplexed
as a blind man trying to decipher colors
through the imprints of his fingers"
You continue to make me smile from the beauty of your magnificent writing. You are amazing.
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Thank you for the encouraging words.
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I liked your use of alliteration and internal rhyme in this. While it reads like a brainstorm of ideas, there is a cognitive flow to this from beginning to end. I also liked the seemingly incongruous lines like L5 and the end. They gave the piece an interest that it might otherwise lack
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A very powerful and lovely piece. The title, too, is powerful and well-chosen. I had to read the poem twice because it was so good, and I wanted every detail.
I really like the part about the blind man, that's a really powerful image.
(I call myself a writer and used the same word three times in one comment... shameful XD)
~Sparrow
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I am glad you enjoyed it enough to warrant it multiple read. I usually find myself very critical of what I write...wouldn't even really call it poetry, lol... but I was ready to scrap this.
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This is a great poem. For me it calls an interesting thought to mind. It seems as though there is a "condition" for everything. Psychologists, desperately trying to cure people of their alilments, some of which aren't truly ailments but different perspectives of perception.
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yes, exactly
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This awesome! All so coherent and I can really relate to it, especially the last line.
Causing individuals to remain as perplexed
as a blind man trying to decipher colors
through the imprints of his fingers
This is a great idea- well done!
It's stange, you know, becasue I expected this to have been written for a contest. Perhaps becasue it stands out as being so unique and it's very personal and stylised. Ah... I don't know how to explain what I mean.
Great piece, anyway.
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I am a bit speechless by your compliment.
Thank you for reading and I am truly glad you enjoyed it.
To be honest I don't think very much of what I write and almost threw this away.
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Throw it away? OMG, I would be very pleased with this, if I'd written it!
Perhaps it is because you didn't use much structure or rhythm, or rhyme in this that made you think it wasn't worth posting. However, it is this spoken language feel and naturalism that I really enjoyed about it. It seems to me as though the speaker is thinking about this subject for the first time. I feel as though I am reading someone's thoughts as I read this, which is a great effect.
Thanks for sharing and next time you feel that something isn't worth posting, please post anyway. I'll enjoy it, no matter how bad you think it might be! ^^ -
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thank you for the encouragement
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