Banana, he's a yellow fruit
In Spring, upon a tree
He wears a green and unripe suit
There's none as fine as he.
But when the autumn comes along
He fattens up in size
And sings a fine and happy song
Which makes of him a prize.
And then we turn him inside out
We eat his inner wealth
He cannot speak, he cannot shout
How awful for his health.
I'd rather be a buttercup
Among the meadow grass
If someone came and plucked me up
New life would come to pass.
For other flowers would quickly grow
And fill the gap I'd left
My happy sisters, on they'd go
And I'd not be bereft.
Author notes
Even bananas have feelings. And flowers have little lives.
A contest entry
- Yellow Yellow Yellow by Kiddy.
400 points, ended April 9, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Brilliant first stanza.
I WOWed at the penultimate stanza.
The final one is excellent.
Kiddy's score - 37.8/40
Dr. Veer's score - 39/40
Total - 76.8/80
All the best
Love
Kiddy
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Superb Plus +
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. It also reminds me of one which I wrote, called: "Bananas (Inspiration):
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this is a very nice poem
definitely fits the contest!
hope all goes well <3 -
Fruit and veg with feelings :(
Oh they do indeed. Not a veggie (as you know) but WHAT will this do to them - the vegetarians??! Heartless you are. I, personally, have dedicated my time on allpoetry to writing the thoughts of Brussels Sprouts!! (mostly wind and wuthering).
Ah, but your last verse has a touch of forever gone about it. Other flowers fill the gaps. Mine will probably be a big white trumpety bindweed. x
Seriously now - this was both happy and sad for me.. Thanks chum. x
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That was a wonderful poem, now one of my favorites. I love the way it flowed and the wording you chose. You have such skill with rhythm and rhyming as well as diction. Great imagery and a wonderful theme. Great write, all best of luck to you in this contest.
Take care,
Moon Raven
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