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Rain

Pristine translucent beads falling from the sky,

refreshing and cleansing in purest quintessence,

but let them stream in salient drops from an eye

and they will preserve the sea taste of a heart stain

in the mind as an ocean of sadness that never evaporates.

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Prompt: SALTY

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  • Meroza
    March 31

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    This poem here, the choisen words, the meaning, its beautiful! I've always loved the rain, and this poem sure does it justice. Congrats on the shiny

    Take care


  • Confusedboy
    March 5

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    Thank you

    I can relate to this poem. my tears are as the ocean at times, that never evaporates. very nice.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 5

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    Oh what wonderful similes you have used here. Such an excellent response to the prompt.
    Congratulations on your well deserved gold.
    Gaylene


  • ScarletO gold member
    March 4
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    The last line is very painful and full of imagery. Well done.


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    March 4
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    lovely, congratulations on the gold.


  • StarEyes
    March 4

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    I can see why this got the gold! You did great on this one! You captured this one quite well my dear Brother!

    Congrats on the well deserved Gold!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • maralisa silver member
    March 4

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    aw wow this a brillant take on the promt I love your imagery and depth throughout is fantastic congratulations on your shinymaralisa


  • Draig aine gold member
    March 4
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    Ah my friend

    congrats on the Gold, a lovely write, but so sad


  • Ann45 gold member
    March 4
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    Rather sad and lonely is what I get from this
    aww big hug mate


  • rhondasail
    March 4

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    This is like a prayer reflection...seeing the connectedness of the 'tears' from the sky cleansing and pure and the response of the heart adding a 'salt of the earth' to the rain...I love it. Best wishes for the contest. Peace, Rhonda


  • In Too Deep1
    March 4
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    Intriguing writ.One would question, where does a tear go? Does it follow the sea, or cling to the sky? I much prefer the sweet rain of joy to the bitter drops of pain. This is a very deep and beautifully penned take on the prompt. A most enjoyable read, and thanks for entering


  • Denerica
    March 4

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    Oh, how I love this, rain and tears, just all of it is very beautiful...you really outdo yourself. Blessings.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    March 4

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    Oh my what sadness of thoughts
    they river so much movement of imagery
    Wishing you all the best
    Julie





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