Stood alone in the half morn light,
Gazing upon the golden horizon,
My eyes like the great oceans
So blue so magical yet so empty.
Inside my mind I'm thinking,
I'm wondering what it is I should do,
Reflecting upon moments I've buried so deep,
Remembering moments that make me weep.
But as my form begins to crumple,
As my heart begins to shatter,
Like a guardian angel, you wrap around
Your warm, your gentle your loving arms
Your voice a whisper in my ear,
Caressing me as i lay and fumble
Telling me to let it go
Telling me to get it out.
'My love, I'm sorry for what he has done
A angel with a beauty beyond compare
A heart once so light and fair
But now so troubled and held down with despair'
He held me tightly and I couldn't help but look upon,
His eyes showing his hidden pain
I clutched tighter until I sighed
I need you I hope you know ,so please
Take this Heart before it shatters,
Before I loose control
Take it within your grasp
And keep me alive.
Author notes
"Take This Heart"
A contest entry
- Titles Challenge Contest Write a poem called the title I give you by PureRomance.
650 points, ended March 9, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what ya think?
Comments
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I really enjoy what you say in this. A few things concerning it though.
I like the first stanza, although the oceans are anything but empty. third line, third stanza is kinds hanging. An Angel. Work on proper placement of puncuation, makes it flow better. The sentiment is grand, we all hope that we would have someone there to catch us when we fall.
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This poem is very emotional and I enjoyed reading it so much. You did an amazing job with the title and the flow and the story within the lines of the words that etch this poem. You did an excellent job with this. Keep up the excellent work. God bless you always in everything you do and write and best wishes to you and your poem in this contest.
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