Across this antique silent winter plain,
Upon the wind once more the old “hurrah”
From lips of vanished kings the old patois
Is heard throughout that fabled lost domain.
Once more I see the ghosts of armies slain
Rise from these moonlit plains of Nineveh,
March in the dark to cities ruled by Ra
When Sennacherib ruled with such distain.
And now, again, they study war once more,
As wan ghosts gape from each their sundered grave.
That potent spell, the mighty spell of war,
These armies now, their different pinions wave,
For death has spread his dark basaltic wings
Above the vanquished crumbled tombs of kings.
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, the bleak portrayal of war, and its uselessness, is certainly emphasized. Very well written as usual. -
Wow...this is amazing, what great imagery, I almost felt ike i was there. Nicely penned. truly a masterpiece.
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Love the dark imagery of this thrilling sonnet, a wonderful tune of old is woven with the skill of your quill. Most exelant michael, this is fab.
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Great Mood Capture
Wow, it's been a while since I've poked around this place. But, awesome sonnet. I just read it through the first time and let the words tumble over me and set the mood, eerie and dark. Lovely (which seems such an odd word to associate with eerie and dark).
Like good poems, though, this one stands up to more than one reading. The only thing that seemed out of place was the word "hurrah". It just seemed too modern for my ears for the time and mood you were trying to capture. Might just be me. Have to agree with others about those "dark basaltic wings" Great line.
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Once more I see the ghosts of armies slain
Rise on these moonlit plains of Nineveh,
March in the dark to cities ruled by Ra
When Sennacherib ruled with such distain.
And now, again, they study war once more,
As wan ghosts gape from each their sundered grave.
That potent spell, the mighty spell of war,
i think thios is a great part
it gives the sense of inspiration from our fallen comrades
it says they did it
me, too
as we lay in the foxhole
it corages us to go on
to sit, to wait, to tic tac toe (lol)
i personally am not a big fan of war
but
it happens
i usually walk down another street
if i sense something is not right
some are impostors
they expound peace
but
really have disgrunted hearts
oh, they call them impostors
like your work
like your theme
but, peace is nicer
no will to be mean
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I love the imagery in these 2 lines:
Once more I see the ghosts of armies slain
Rise from these moonlit plains of Nineveh
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Years ago I wanted to be a Sumerologist. It's funny to hear Mesopotamian names in verse! I particularly like "dark basaltic wings".
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this is really, really good. it is nice to see someone writing about biblical subjects. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Powerful
I like how you chose diction with powerful stressors. The piece has a pulse to it that gives energy to the tone and interest to the action. All the scene is vivid and intense, so full of mystery, pain, and the thrill of history's mark. This is a great sonnet!
, Dannie
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