I close my eyes and begin to relax
Allowing myself to think of a place I once loved
Warm summer days spent in cool spring water
This place where I never remember a care
Now I can return there, if only by meditation
I can believe I lie above the refreshing water
The cool spring fed lake I feel upon my back
As I believe I float about the surface
My nostrils fill with the unique smells
Of the ever-greens which grow upon the mountain
Different from the smell of Christmases past
Mixing with the ever present smell of dew
And the unique smell of fallen, composting leaves
I close my eyes and drift away to that place
The mountain and lake I loved, once upon a time
Author notes
this is about nature, and being at "Lac Green" or Green Lake where my grandparents used to cottage, it's the place i go to when i am deep in meditation, i hope you can feel it too as you read it... i feel like it's missing something tho
A contest entry
- About Something Green by Kiddy.
600 points, ended April 9, 20 entries
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Memories like this are so marvelous--I think of the healing places in books like Lord of the Rings--Rivendell, Beorn's house, and others like that.
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Wonderfully done. You have penned what you have experienced/known/seen brilliantly. Thanks for entering.
Kiddy's score - 47
Dr.Veers Score - 48
Total - 95
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Kiddy -
Serene & tranquil...
A touching piece that reflects fond memories & meditative safety...
Wonderfully expressed in a flowing narrative that made for an enthralling read...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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A very nice piece that feels peaceful and calming. Your descriptions were very nice and soothing. I could feel the cooling water and smell the evergreens. I think you did a very nice job on this piece!
Lily ♥
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Very nostalgic. I enjoyed this read.
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