Pen dripping its ink
across the challenge scroll,
just for a taste of gold.
Yellow the image
painting the mind,
give it shine
and call it mine!
But silence smothers the vision,
amber comes
in muted absence of any reply
where you feel pissed on
by the one
who held the door open
to the denizen of creativity.
Pounded by such pondering aggravations,
did your verse somehow reek of muse urine?
Was it so pathetically watery
from liquefied metaphors or images
that it didn’t have any solidity to that person’s eyes?
You’ll never know
because he or she is off holding next inventive test
and you’re left
with only frustration as a prize.
A contest entry
- Sick of lazy contest hosts? by Floorboards.
1150 points, ended March 10, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nice, Here are my scores.
Imagery. 18/20.
Metaphor.17/20.
Feelings. 17/20.
Grammar. 20/20.
Enjoyability 18/20.
Total. 90! great score!
Very well penned, nothing to critique, very enjoyable poem.
Good luck!
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wonderful
like this poem of your's.... done in a rich and impressive way.......hope you like my ideas too
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......and I think some people aren't completely truthful about our work - which I guess is what you're referring to - so much truth in your words. Sometimes I wish they would be more truthful, so we could get better at doing what we're trying to diligently in our own eyes to do.
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a well scripted and versed point of view you have penned here hun
I love it
Best wishes to you
Julie
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Ooooooooooo I do love this one
This is so very true from both sides of the coin.
So well penned. Loved somne of those words you used! They fit this soooooooo well 'muse urine'
Best wishes with this, but I think you have sure nailed this one!
Gaylene
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wow - your wording, as usual, is so unique, so full of vivid images! I like this!
best wishes in the contest
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PERFECTION!!!!! You nailed it in a way that only you could!!! I for one know that I most frequently reek of muse urine since I never get commented upon!!! Perhaps a cathartic rinse will help invite those comments...Off for my holy waters I go!! Your the bestest!!
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Yes, indeed! 'Tis true!
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a fantastic write good luck in the contest
maralisa
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This isn't my "proper" comment, but I like this.
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A wonderful piece of work, my best wishes.
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So true, and put so eloquently as only you can my friend. Having not the grasp of the English language that your illustrious self does. I just told them to F**king comment!!! I found more people respond to the direct approach... Very well done...Scott
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Laughs, drools, wipes chin...
rolls around on floor, then..................
cries, 'cause this shit really happens. wahhh
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