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Forever Emerald

Missing image
Where kappertjies bloom
in shadows of moist and of moss,
we built rough steps on river banks,
leading to leafy lofts.

Yellow faces with orange hearts
alight in the green seam
of soft; olive and dark gold ghoenas,
aglow in sunshine.

Bamboo shoots carried the dream
sublime of pan flute and air-songs,
caught forever
in nodules
of wait.

Green became more than growth.
It became the emerald
pathway
straight to Heaven.

Paradise lost.


Author notes

Kappertjies: Nasturtiums
Ghoenas: Edible veldt fruit

Photo: Myra, December 25, 2008 -- Steps leading to Droomves, Herold's Bay, Eden, South Africa.

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  • Kiddy
    April 8
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    Kiddy's score - 43
    Dr. Veer's score - 45

    Total - 88


  • Kiddy
    April 8
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    How nicely done! ..WOW!! I loved the vivid images.
    Thanks for entering.

    Love
    Kiddy


  • PerVirtuous
    March 21
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    I cannot help but feel you are but a single step away from heaven. Outstanding.


  • deercatcher
    March 6

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    I have been thinking of a poem about God buying back all the things you sold to survive
    That took little pieces of your soul
    Treasure coerced
    Love devalued and cast away
    Gathered into cedar chest cut from bloody beams
    From a project of his son
    Your lost treasures are sequestered in cedar scent
    Layered in Linen, satin and silk
    Waiting for you
    Under the diamond cut decanter
    Of the tears
    You only thought
    you cried alone


    Or something like that...
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/5079455

    i thought the judge abit harsh. It was my favorite line...
    I think there is a (seek home) command buried deep in our hearts; God's fail safe; we long for a savior. All the longing, the unfulfilled expectations are from our appetite for God. GK Chesterton thought so, too. Maybe I ruffed her feathers...


    • myrataal silver member
      March 6
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      Brother Benjamin ...

      you have the ability to make me cry every time I read a word of you! You are my own private tonic of healing elixer, do you know? I will bottle your words and sip of those every time I need to let my oceanic sorrow overflow ...


  • Jaded Lily gold member
    March 6

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    Very interesting and I like how you explain your terms in your author notes, thank you! Best of luck in the contest and always!
    Lily ♥


  • dustytiger
    March 5

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    ooo i can hear the pan flute as i am reading this piece, what a beautiful image you have spun with your words, the end is so chilling because we really are losing most pieces of paradise, best of luck in the contest


  • stompsalot
    March 5

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    gorgeously GREEN. I love it. lovely imagery accented by a gorgeous pic. very talented, soothing writ.e.
    many blessings 8stomps

  • J Macabre gold member
    March 4

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    Wilderness is paradise indeed. I mean its the only sight really that's genuinely beautiful anymore.
    The lush leaves,smell of the trees,the wildlife lurking everywhere.
    True untouched beauty.


  • GotLilt
    March 4
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    Lovely!

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