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sidewalk harmony




vivid moon and stars,
wrapped in h-u-m from power lines -
breeze moves some litter












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  • Luciferschild
    March 24

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    this poem was very abstract and cool, i like how i can read this time and time again and still get a different meaning

  • drifting cloud silver member
    March 8
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    creates a vivid picture.


  • Matt Holck
    March 5

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    three distinct images chorused together on a midnight sidewalk

    at first I thought,
    the night sky was a wrapping blanket
    power line strung along would hum


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 4

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    wow very pretty short and sweet Some breeze moves litter, glad I don't have to pick it up LOL
    It was a pleasure to read


  • Denerica
    March 4
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    Brilliant, imagery and the hum spelled out. Well written. Blessings.

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 4

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    love this, what a moment you create here, it really touches all the senses in only 14 words. i love h-u-m like that.


    • motel silver member
      March 4
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      thanks so much.
      wrote out HUM that way, like one is in the process of chanting.
      as always, thanks.


  • aboomer silver member
    March 4

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    I've never tried a haiku - so I'm impressed at the vivid image you've painted in just a few words!
    Nice job!
    best wishes in your contest

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