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Our Lies

I am sitting here waiting.
I want the soft sounds of death to take over me.
I am watching you bleed it out with me.
We try so hard to be so perfect.
We wait so long to fall.
Can our lives be so torn apart that we have no where to turn?
Are we so alone that no one can see.
How the tears fall down.
And mix with the blood flowing to something better.
Do we seem so strong. To others who want the world better.
That our lies cover up what is really going on inside.

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  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 26

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    this was dark and powerful but how true we do hide our pain from others and sometimes thats necessary or we all would be bleeding on the ground well done with this and know you are not so all alone


    • carmel apple
      August 14
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      Glenn Shannon... thank you for commenting.. I am sorry it has taken me so long to return but I have been gone and sick at the same time.
      but

      thank you for stating what you thought about my poem. I agree.. we all hide it at one time or the other.. sometimes it is not good and at times it is bad..