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Shape Me With Love

You played it safe and said

"Don't fall in love with me"

But the very thought of

Not giving you my heart

Made me want to cry

 

 

You dodged the idea of any

Notion of more than a being

A friend to me by returning

Back to thoughts of her

 

 

You stood your ground

With me and made sure I

Needed you for everything

That I did, and you relished

In the fact I craved you

 

 

You became my need, my

Want, my desire, and you

Knew that my feelings were

Forged deep within my soul

 

 

You turned cold when you

Found out my love, that

Would not die, but you have

Only yourself to blame for

My love was shaped by you

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Title Prompt: Shape Me With Love

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  • songstress80
    August 12

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    a great write. there is so much truth within your words here. unfortunately we never want to admit that it's true, that someone basically 'shapes' our heart and our love for them. basically creating us into what we become. truely you have great work here. i'm sure that many of us have sadly been down this road before.


  • FelinePoetess
    May 15
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    good work

    a very deep and poignant tale of unrequited love!wonderful!


  • GothicFyre
    May 10

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    Lovely writing, I loved it - it was really tender and poignant. Great writing, I truly admire your talent. You are gifted.


  • Mengie gold member
    May 10

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    Hi!
    Oh I so know the feeling! I´m in it right now! I´m in love with a man who tries to forget me..
    I´m not much of comment on poems, I just don´t find the good words. But this poem spoked to me.

    <3 Menglod


  • petalblue2
    April 20
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    What an amazing depiction of what vulnerability is created when we love someone. I can totally relate to this. It is no wonder we are so fearful of handing out our heart, as it seems that once they have it you simply can not just take it back. Wonderful write
    Blue~


  • darkyinsoul
    April 20

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    Awww... how sweet.
    Penned with passion.
    I loved it.
    Thanks for the share.
    Pen on my friend.
    Love Teddy Bear


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 18

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    Wonderful and touching...this is how I can describe what I read.. Just another beautiful poem. THANKS!


  • Janjan
    April 18
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    Dear tearsofsilence: Written from your heart. Loved it. Love, Janjan xoxo

  • museme
    April 17

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    Wonderful

    This poem really does wonders for the soul. It grips the reader with the first stanza and doesn't let go till the end. You sure leave a special mark with this poem.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 15
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    power full and kinda sad but ay least you werent lead along. fine work hear tears .


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    April 8

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    Shape me Death
    try this title too, when you start writing next
    I'm tired of me.
    will see death soon

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

  • sensual
    March 31

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    This is really good, I love the ending it makes for a good way to say.. this is what you've done to me. I love it... Great work. kassie


  • nitelite
    March 28

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    once again..amazing

    this one made me cry. i kno what ur tryin to express and you painted the picture in my mind beatifully i loved it


  • guardianhost gold member
    March 17

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    Chasing after that Elusive Butterfly of love...

    I loved the poem and the butterfly background!
    My wish is that you find happiness and joy.
    Your Friend,
    Cheryl


  • TaintedLoveSong
    March 11

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    This has to be the most heart wrenching and beautiful thing I have ever herd. I love this poem. It made me cry. Be cause it is very true. Thanks for the beautiful words.


  • PureRomance
    March 8

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    This is a beautiful poem and somewhat heartbreaking at the same time. I'm sorry that the love you feel wasn't returned by your other. You did an amazing job on this. I'm sorry that you've been through this. God bless you always and best of luck to you and your poem in this contest.


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    March 4

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    Ah...love unrequited. This is a fairly dark view of it, borders a wee bit towards the obssessive. No one can make you want or need them, that comes from within. Gives a good view at the mindset of the narrator. Don't quite get the final stanza, doesn't read well.
    Peace


    • tears.of.silence
      March 4
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      Yeah I like my butterflies and thought it better if I keep that a light tune instead of another darkness.. The final stanza is telling you that "he didn't want me, he wasn't willing to take the next step, my love was shaped by him and now he can't handle it... "

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