When I walked with turmoil along paths of thought
I seized an identity dwelling there
Ripped it to shreds
Threw the pieces upon the wind
Their image lost within the storm
I stumbled, sightless,
mired in reflection cast by unlit night
A contorted form obscured the way
Parchment skin
Lit faintly from within
Stretched tight over twisted limbs
Darkness lay in open eyes
Now identity spread no lies
Within stagnant depths,
Light defiles
Greedy hands curled
As death unfurled
Fingers raking stony ground,
Grasping the world
The raven’s wings spread
Etched, with graphite lead
Upon the paper white chest
As the life blood fled
Held within the raven’s claw
Revealed by the fading glow
A small flower grew
Petals, pale crushed velvet
Lay on leaves of deepest jade
I bent to feel its fragrant breath
Draw aside the shadows
For half a moment in time
Author notes
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Hi there, I've been around on AP off and on for a year or so and am constantly learning more about how to write from all thats available and the great writing on this site. This piece is about our search to find our own identity. I've cut this down a bit so it's not 41 lines any more sorry I forgot to count the spaces if its still too long I'll cut it a little more (always like to edit, who knows where it will take you)
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The first word that comes to mind is Excellant" and it describes everything about this wonderful soul searching write. Thank you and Good Luck in the contest. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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The poetry that's written from heart always turns out to be the best.... and this composition is one of them... I enjoyed each and every line of it....
good luck in the contest...
mina
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No...please do not cut it...this took my breath away...Fabulous imagery, unchartered depth and vivid imagination and feelings...
What a package!
Good luck with the contest and thanks for entering.
Cheers
Sandy
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Thanks for the comments and extra space. Great contest with some really interesting prompts.
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Wow this is really good. I enjoyed reading this. It painted a very vivid image in my head. It's hard to describe but it was very 17th century gothic feeling. I enjoyed where the poem went and hope to read more. :
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