Love me baby
just for tonight
love me maybe
until the break of light
Love me now
we may never have yet
another someday, somehow
or chance to take what you get
Love me once, maybe twice
look at only me
for just one night
love me, and watch me leave.
Author notes
"Love Me Once"
A contest entry
- Titles Challenge Contest Write a poem called the title I give you by PureRomance.
650 points, ended March 9, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Could you please comment and let me know what you think
Comments
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One night stand
If there's a 'one night stand' thing going on via this poem, I don't feel that 'love me' is the right two words. Been there myself and 'hold me' seems to me to be what is really going on in such situations. Nit picking perhaps, because being loved and being held are not so different, perhaps? -
I like the contrast of the positive declaration, "Love me" with the doubting vocab - maybe, somehow, etc. Good poem.
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A musical poem but lacking any deep spiritual content I felt. You need to feel the spirit to know what deep life is. God bless you and keep you from sin.
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ooooh short, sweet and POWERFUL, you will go far in this contest if you can do other forms and lengths with the same quality.
well done.
round 2
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Great write!
I really did like this, I agree with everyone below. Its a beautiful poem. I can relate to it in some way. Well anyways keep writing. :]
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sorry
i forgot to leave u an applaud =]
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i like it , its really sweet!
keep writing,you're amazing
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oh now I gotta say I really do like this one... excellent write. Thanks for sharing this... and at least she was willing for one night... but then, the walk away... she ran before her heart could be broken.
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great take on the prompt. Gongrats on the gold
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Beautiful poem
A lovely take on the prompt -
awwwww
damn
i will love you lol
this was great though i really do love it]
you have no idea
<33
Love me now
we may never have yet
another someday, somehow
or chance to take what you get
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You did an excellent job with the title I gave you. I enjoyed reading this masterpiece so much. I'm very impressed with what you've done. God bless you and best of luck to you and your poem in the contest.
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Maybe it's jsut me but I get a real Doors vibe out of this. Like it quite a bit.
Good Stuff
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love me once...just once for one time..how i wish love happens!
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sure you can. Send me a message and I'll give you your title.
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