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Inspiration

She is
chitter chatter and curiosity
giddy and serious
studious and entertaining
happy and yet dark
beautiful and sweet
helpful and generous
a youth wise beyond her years.

She is
humble but proud of accomplishments
a pianist in the making
an artist with her words
rhyme and rhythm perfect
the top of her class
a consumer of books
the world's greatest daughter.


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  • SimplySonnets gold member
    April 21

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    A fine tribute

    Not only to an obviously lovely daughter, but also to youself for creating such a masterpiece of humanity.
    As indeed you have painted with your beautiful words.
    A joy, thank you.


  • TabbyJoy
    March 23

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    oh wow...what a beautiful tribute to a daughter. I would have been...and still would be...honored to have such a lovely piece dedicated to me.

  • Topnotchsy
    March 5

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    This is a really beautiful write. I live the way you start this, "she is" really builds the anticipation, and then the descriptions are great (especially the contrasts like in the 5th line) because they capture the interesting way that life seems to be filled with paradoxes. This example is even more so because I have had the pleasure to interact with the topic of this poem, and I've seen just a little bit about the person you've described. A very talented, poet who is articulate, friendly and as you say, "wise beyond her years."


    • e911
      March 18

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      just so you know

      She is not only that... she had a 98 average in school, volunteers and works at local library and as her mother works about 70 - 80 hours a week, she does almost all of the chores in the house(not saying she does them as well as I would... there are some things that a young person just doesn't see or know how to clean However, she could have her own house and run it just fine. Not to mention her personality. I am so proud of her and her brother, I could break my arm patting myself on the back, but my parents helped so much with them, it stops me from the arm-breaking-pat unless I include them.


  • Shrat
    March 5

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    Hi mom! I'm going to pretend this poem was written by a total stranger while I comment to keep from being biased. Okay?

    You started it out well. a first line that makes you wonder what's going to happen. makes you consider what the poem is about. The alliteration in the second line was beautifully done, and you did a good job starting to build your character. I could go through and pick it apart line by line all day, I keep wanting to read it. Though it's free verse, it's free verse POETRY, and that's hard to do. You did wonderfully. Great job mom! I love it. Thanks!

    Love,

    Your kid, Shrat, or victoria.

    P.s. I'm taking time from laundry and cleaning to comment on this. Sorry!

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