Seems like these word warz will never stop
The Dark Suns words will never flop
Check out your tvs, xbox and dvds
The only thing you will be seeing on your screen is me
The rider brings heat even when you peasants sleep
My rays penetrate deep; I scorch paths as I creep
Into the land of the unknown, changing your time zone
Dark sun standard time leaves you home alone
Clinging to what you thought was a battle plea
Why you want to battle me
I’m a bucking bronco no one can saddle me
Or rattle me because I melt down all metal
Expose these fairies and their rose petals
I ingest and regurgitate these haters substrate
Integrate them in my circuits and burn the traces for debate
Of who’s the best, the Dark Sun syndicate thrives on the belligerent
Suckers straight ignorant, my fouls are straight flagrant
Mandatory execution is evident although I stay reverent
Melting fools down leaving their brains on the pavement
Battlers take heed you messing with a mighty steed
I gallop over adversaries as they beg and plead
I stomp them in the ground leave them nowhere to be found
This war is over, I will win all rounds
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OMG, this was outrageously phenomenal! I could feel the beat as I read each word, each line. The master has presented his talents on the before said page.
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My only critique "This war is over, I will win all rounds," would flow better as "This was is over, I win all rounds." Other than that, this was a FANTASTIC contribution to Word Warz. Well written, poet!
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"LOL...I hope this isn't your best. I just overnighted you a 'UB' Vest...If I were you, I'd give it a test...cheer up sonny (you're gonna need the rest)."
Seen-Searly,
Shadow Fist
(UBs Free Agent)
[pssst! Mo, Swan told me about this burner. 'Loved this flow kid. Plus it was hilarious! Of course, that's the exact kinda combo needed in these "Word Warz" pieces. hahaha. Great job my man].
AsIThink...
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well well well...
this ain't even swell..your words don't gell..in fact they flat out smell, hope yo head ain't swell..cause you bout ta git knocked out, l.o.l. farther down i watched how you fell....l.o.l. V.A.
Psst!! hey Mo! yo kid! this was crazy hard, don't pay that fool va no mind he whack!! l.o.l. i loved this!! excellent rant/battle piece!
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lol Oh I'll saddle you alright
I love it when you flow mo! Keep pennin handsome!
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great read Mo
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I am totally impressed with the way you have let the flow go... very strong and powerful diction....
certain word choices like mandatory execution, melting fools, dark sun, bucking bronco, are very powerful and they convey what you mean so right and staright that it impressed me a lot...
The end note is so captivating
Keep writing
thanks fr sharing
Love
Kiddy
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