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Choked

Closing down,
with each breath taken
there are no mistakes,
nor excuses, to be mistaken,
misjudged, broken
every symbolic token
gone, like angry fingers
dancing around this neck,
seeing stars exploding,
a chance to forget
everything is slowing down,
a half life at half speed
eyes staring at the ground,
losing the will to believe
in anything positive,
finding a way to wade through
all this disappointment,
family tirades, familiar lies
too exhausted to care,
sick of such self-righteous attitudes,
and a redundant repertoire,
of endless, water colored replies

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written 2/3/09

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  • Dalaney gold member
    March 6

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    I am going to read more of you.  I like your style.  I like that you aren't 'poetically flippant'.  You seem to know exactly what you want to say and the way you say it makes this reader kinda smile.   Love Lane


  • ReignOnMe
    March 4
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    Wow this creates wonderful imagery. Beautiful work.


  • Sharitti
    March 4
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    I really liked your imagery in your poem. Especially my favorite part:

    sick of such self-righteous attitudes,and a redundant repertoire,of endless, water colored replies

    Your wording flows so beautifully and expresses great emotion. Thank you for entering