burns in the blood, of young men with an eye
caught in the gaze, of young maiden so fair
their defences collapse, ending in sigh.
Blushing face beckons, rose wreath chain in hair
impassioned Pied Piper, hormone thick air.
Spellbound young Turks, fall helpless to defend
when Siren sings song, of love sick despair.
Venus and Mars, earthly life will pretend
playing their proxy's, false love will transcend.
in blood red emotions all lovers will cry
in hopeless romantics, broken hearts mend.
Author notes
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Prompt: The Color Red on any shade of red
INTERLOCKING RUBAIYAT
Schematic: A three stanza interlocking rubaiyat would be:
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Form Round Contest - Round Two by Little Eagle
A contest entry
- Form Round Contest - Round Two by Tammy Knott.
600 points, ended April 14, 2009, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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good write from the prompt ...
~Judie


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A very interesting take on how to meet the prompt. I think the title lends a wonderful explanation to the poem. Great work.


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You truly nailed this prompt and added your own unique spin. Good job on the form too. Good luck in the contest.


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Really good form. You are very talented.
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nice form. What courage you have to step out on the edge and try something different. I admire that.
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You did well!
Your work has gone to a higher level. I see allusions, mythology, alliteration and some good rhyme. That creates a very vivid poem.

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I love the picture that you've put with this, it shows it so well. Love the imagery, especially how you've woven in the planets.

Great!
KW~

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The contraditions, mars/venus. the battle commenced, you put a spellbound both like as if we have put ourselves in the Roman era of classicism. bold work, and will be hard to beat,

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Thank you for the wonderful comment. Comming from such a talent as yourself I'm flattered.
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