I.
I'll wait forever for you.
II.
The time reads eleven,
the loneliness is beginning to spread.
You left just an hour ago,
I'm still waiting for you to come back to me.
III.
Winter has come.
The shreds of light that flicker on the snow
say to me that whatever we had is long gone.
The bristling wind cuts my skin,
it doesn't matter; I'm not feeling anything anymore.
IV.
Spring has just arrived,
the pain I felt has climaxed.
All the wrongs will soon be rights.
I'm still here,
I promised you I'd wait forever.
V.
Forever is here.
Author notes
This is my very first attempt at a Vignette.
I hope that it is suitable.
It was fun to write.
A contest entry
- vignettes by Salty Hibiscus.
700 points, ended April 21, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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awesome write, and even more it was your first attempt to write a vignette poem. thank you for sharing and good luck.
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this was great! i really liked the way you used the vignettes, it was very structured and clear but not forced or awkward.
the fourth section felt a little– off, to me, very different from the other stanzas; i think that's because it's takes place more in the present, which is fine, but the rythym seemed different to me too. [maybe I'm just making that up, though.
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the last line was a great ending. best of luck!
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