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A touch so exquisitely felt,
exasperating my every pore,
Whispering my name within,
I crumble to the floor.
I silently gasp with tears,
knowing you aren't aware,
Of dreams to be fulfilled,
needing you to care.
I want you to feel me inside,
wanting me to caress you,
But love isn't made this way,
unfortunately, it isn't true.
So many times I've hinted,
so blind I am afraid you are,
It's all right don't worry,
It's just another scar.
I'll continue to dream,
one day it will come true,
So I now secretly am telling
I am deeply in love with you.

© March 3, 2009

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  • xxSerendipityxx
    March 21, 2009

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    This poem is so strong, and I know what you mean. This is such a beautiful write, I love it. Best of luck with everything.

    By the way the picture you choose for this poem is prefect for the poem. It is a very intense picture.


  • starjacket silver member
    March 16, 2009
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    Wow! Love the piece and your image! Great job again!


  • Jcsketch82 gold member
    March 13, 2009

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    I love your since of rhythm in this one. It flows very nicely and the emotion that is communicated is amazingly. Great write, thank you for sharing it with us.

  • garethwister
    March 6, 2009

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    Powerful

    Every word here compels me to read it over and over again, and touches my own experience with a piercing accuracy. It resonates powerfully and pulls to the surface feelings and memories that I never share with anyone.


    • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
      March 6, 2009
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      Awe, huge huggs. I know it's hard and it makes you want to just slip away into nothingness; however, we have to stand and believe that one day.


  • Gunther gold member
    March 6, 2009

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    In love, being aware and needing someone to care says it all. Just knowing that you're loved is not always enough. Great write.


  • Rovingone gold member
    March 5, 2009

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    It's all right don't worry,
    It's just another scar.
    I'll continue to dream,
    one day it will come true, Oh, man do I hear that. I keep telling myself if I dream long enough it'll one day come true. Isn't that just the way of it. Your poem is pure truth.


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    March 4, 2009
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    Just Beautiful


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    March 3, 2009
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    Wow

    The flow and rhyme is fantastic! And I can feel the love! Great words + imagery! X x


  • ArtemisAglow
    March 3, 2009
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    very sensual and beautiful...it has a haunting note..and i can definitely relate to this!!

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