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Let It Rain

HOW can you stand in front of me,
Complaining about the rain-
While I lay
    Sprawled
      At
    Your
        Feet?

THIS knife is clasped in my hand,
Glistening red proves my intentions.
    Trembling,
        I beg for
            Help.

LIFE used to be so sweet…
Full of hope and what I could get…
But now it’s life I aim for.
    And yet…
        You say you’re
      Too cold!

HAS the sun fallen from grace?
Did I blink and become too afraid
To face the world?
    My friend,
      Can’t you see
Our differences?

COME closer. Let me trace your face…
My love, I’m being blinded by fear.
I know you don’t care…
But in my dying moments
    Can you
      At least
  Pretend?

TO the others I always seemed fine.
We knew they’d judge.
We knew they’d hate…
    But I never knew
        You were one
      Of
        Them!

AN age… it seemed.
Since you cared.
When you wiped my tears
And held me tight.
    But now you comment on the rain…
      I know you don’t care.
So why bother pretend?

END it all. Please, Lord-
Hear my prayer.
I can feel my warm blood soak
Into my clothes.
    I don’t care anymore.
  My love… I give up.
    So I hope you get your wish…
I hope it rains for you!

Perhaps you didn’t quite realise?

I won’t be here to watch you dance.


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  • Bob Fox
    March 10

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    Poet

    A chilling piece of poetry filled with hopelessness and despair. Perhaps a cleansing rain is needed to sooth the hurting heart.


  • tears.of.silence
    March 6

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    Very good. I really like how you transcended down the words and kept it going. Great flow.. I love the ending. "How This Life Has Come To An End" Nice hidden sentence. Kahy


  • DeeDee
    March 5

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    I liked this one. I liked the way it read, the format and the subject! Vivid imagery, strong emotion. A very nice piece....DeeDee


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 3
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    The hidden sentence is how this life has come to an end

  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 3

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    I really like the formatting its like rain. I also think this is a very creative piece and it is unique. excellent write 3.5 billion clappy people lol

    -deadly


  • Apocalyptic Scarves
    March 3

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    not to shabby, seemed a bit wordy to me tho, you could probably condense these ideas down better and make it flow better

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