Would you take a tear
and let it be a genie
for love?
Or treat one dark thought
as a spell
so this sadness
could be all you remember?
Because I feel pain,
seeing the distance
in your stare,
can’t help wondering
if it would change
should I disappear?
Author notes
49 words
prompt-- "what if you...could wish me away, what if you...spoke those words today...I wonder if you'd miss me...when I'm gone"--beginning of the song "What if You" by Joshua Radin
A contest entry
- my first quickie...make it memorable!! by Whyitt U.
700 points, ended March 3, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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loved that opening stanza.. it just draws you in to read more and more... as usual, your take on the prompt was great! congrats on the bronze.
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aw a wonderful write so full of depth and emotion good luck in the contest
maralisa
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I like this, the first stanza really drew me in....great take on the prompt. I think maybe it should be you instead of your in the second stanza. Thanks for entering.
wyatt
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Powerful write. Great take on the prompt. I liked the part of the tear and the genie. It seemed metaphorical, as though the tear could rub the genie lamp and grant a wish. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Haley Mary
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