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there was a way.

it wasn't laura's turn to run up to the glassdoor or smile cute smile at the bird, not unless her brother would permit her go do something less important. but she did; matt was not happy with that at all. there was a way that game was played, after all he made it up.

 "you should always follow the rules, captain," matt said, dismayed by his unruly sister.

the children amused themselves while mother wiped off no-tears from her face, there was a ruddy tinge which made her look ill. she looked buried in wait. she didn't realise that her tears stopped coming out. there were just the incessant moaning from everywhere.

"genbell sir, they took our ...umm they'll steal that over there too sa..." laura didn't want to play that game, she wanted to see pretty feathers, stare at the mosaic floor and dance about. 

the children heard the bell of the elevator ting tong. they both ran up to the painting of an old man, in front of which, the glassdoor separated the children from the bird who showed off its elegant maneuvers (to both its audience and a few peahens). they stared in wonder, while mother wailed over a stretcher.

a lot of other women seemed to do the same.

matt counted the big-boxes covered with somanyflags. it was a long day.  

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writing is a therapy. i am not a writer. i am a liar and a flesh eating monster.

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  • checkmate
    March 16

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    first of all, you are a writer. and this proves it. it is beautiful, breathtaking, stunning. and better than any book i have read in ages. i love how short it is, and still can impact the reader. it's honestly amazing all the way through.

    ooh, second of all congrats on the silver shiney

    third of all, you can't be a flesh eating monster because as you say, you are a liar. XD

    oh. && this is amazing. and you are amazing times a thousand.

    -checky.

  • unraveled
    March 8

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    the last three sentences are what makes this such a wonderful piece, and such a terribly intriguing cage.

    captivating... thank you for entering
    -cassidy

  • "she didn't realise that her tears stopped coming out. there were just the incessant moaning from everywhere."

    this rather produced a tenderness nonpareil to anything in recent memory


  • Titus gold member
    March 5

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    I disagree, you are a writer: I most enjoyed the prose immensely, well done, I lovd, the bit, 'there were just the incessant moaning from everywhere.' shows me that everyone was a part of the picture. nice write. Titus/Titian

  • oh, wow! now this is some good prose. I don't know how to feel, sad or intrigued by the childrens sweet ignorance. beautiful piece all the way around!




  • monstruo
    March 4

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    the image of a woman weeping over a stretcher as her children played about her was almost too much to mentally embrace at first.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 4

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    Brilliant piece dear, and I love that word, 'ruddy.'

    All the best.
    With much love.
    mj.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 3

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    Children are so resiliant in situations of sadness, it's a self-preservation mode I think we lose after time.
    Sounds like a very long day.

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