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Destruction

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the news was devastating
he’d told her quietly,
as best he could,

“he didn’t suffer”


she knew differently
a mother always knows

he was no martyr,
just a fighter with conviction

his father would have been proud;


she was heartbroken
and saw no sense
in destruction

of life 


  ... his life

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt. 40-70 words

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Credit David Beckerman



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  • Thomas Scott gold member
    March 7
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    vivid and horrifying

    Well done, Sue.
    Hope this piece does well in the contest.

    Tom


  • deercatcher
    March 5
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    Kind of destroys her life, too, yes?


  • Rovingone gold member
    March 5

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    Oh, that is so beautiful and painfully aware. You made the picture come to life in a way that brings tears to the heart.


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 5

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    Phew babes-this short write holds much power and feeling-straight to the heart and more-
    Top marks and Good Luck
    Hilly xxx

  • Purrsanthema
    March 4

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    This is beautiful and true. I'm reminded of that recent movie about Kipling's son, and the rift it made between his mother and his father: their different interpretation of their son's death.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 4

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    Emotional write that grips you as one reads...and so suited to the prompt!

  • amysticwriter silver member
    March 3
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    Excellent write Sue...one of your best...mary


  • Legend silver member
    March 3

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    A very powerful write.Only someone who has carried a child nursed it and nurtured it can truly know the pain of its loss.
    Never did understand the phase he would have made his father proud.Being a father i would far sooner him be a live coward.I see no pride in the the death of any young man or woman
    Whoops I'm spouting again Sorry Just meant to say a wonderful piece

  • Bad Bill
    March 3

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    Emotionally powerful and convincing - a genuinely sad and distressing read.

    Excellent work,
    Bill


  • arafura gold member
    March 3
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    Very touching. Beautifully written and expressed.

  • Shayla Walker
    March 3
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    My aunt lost two children, I can only imagion her pain.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 3

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    very good take on the prompt... i can definately see her anguish being caused by the loss of a child...no parent ever wants to bury their children, not the way the cycle of life is supposed to be.. good job and goodluck

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