From the very beginning she was too trusting; too trusting for her own good.
Like a malleable metal, she was easily twisted into thinking she was worth something and moulded into someone she was not.
She longed to be rose gold; warm and treasured and admired but in reality she was mercury; cold and misunderstood and dull
unless you look closely.
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But no one has looked close enough yet; not close enough to see the flecks of gold in her grey-green eyes or to notice that she leaves out the full stop at the end of "I love you" because she doesn't want it to end. Never close enough to see that she starves herself daily in the hope that if her ribs stick out
she'll stick out in your mind.
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She used to believe in the cliché “every cloud has a silver lining" but these days "every silver lining has a cloud" would be more accurate. She muses that if she were a cloud she would be stratus, not cirrus; instead of light carefree wisps she is made of heavyhearted knots and although she might not look pretty
she brings the rain.
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Yesterday, your heat evaporated what little was left of her and today she is desperately trying to recondense into something stronger. She's learned that silver linings don’t exist in the real world and full stops don’t make a difference when all is lost. Because of you, she's given up pleading for impossibilities and wishing on stars and drinking that lethal poison called hope. You might not have killed her but
you made her stronger.
Author notes
Not sure what this is. Just started writing in the early hours of the morning and this is what I came up with.
Doesn't necessarily relate to me or anyone else although most of it is there for a reason.
Tell me if it's really really bad please. 
-abi
What do you guys think??
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wow, i really really like this! such great use of your metaphor, this is really well written! GREAT poem! =D
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She longed to be rose gold; warm and treasured and admired but in reality she was mercury; cold and misunderstood and dull
unless you look closely.
-ooh;; very nice.
"every silver lining has a cloud"
-I LOVEE this. Honestly, how do you think of that?! ;;I'm very jealous right now!
she brings the rain.
-This is a great line to end the stanza with.
...i can not believe i havnt read more about you earlier! you are breath-taking! -
You're blessed and its obvious! You should be more confident with your talent, though. You, of all ppl, should NEVER underestimate yourself. You're definitely gifted! As of now, U R my 'literary inspiration', if that makes any sense. Good JOB!!!!
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Wow, I've never been anyone's literary inspiration before.
At least I don't think I have...
Thanks so much, that means a lot.
Oh and did you notice how I changed it from "was" to "were"???
Silly me. Thanks.
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well writin
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my goodness.. this is amazing.. your so talented. I love it, its so sad... I can realte to most of this so well hunni. you are worth something and everyday I'm seeing more to the amazing person you are
i love you
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Thanks Hollie, that means so much.
Same to you dearie.
I love you
^ without the full stop
-abi x x x -
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if you look up, mine didn't have a full stop eithier
your welcome abi-kins
x x x x x x x x x xx x x x x x x x x x x x
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