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Action of her brain cells killing each other
Lost images and memories amidst the fog
Zig Zagging through emotions that choke her 
Hopeless as she knows there's no cure
Examinations have proved her fatal future
Irreparable she's crying as she feels lost
Massacre of the human body betrays
Evermore questioning her faith in the lord
Remorse as she looks around- everything is spinning 
Shattered at the thought of not seeing her

Dear grand-children blooming
Instanbility lies in her mind at what lies ahead
Shall she just end up as a shell with none of her soul left
Exucating thoughts of writing her will smothers her in pain
An old woman with a atrocious mind; will she become unkind
Shadows of the old days will all be in vain
Educated all of her life and now she's wondering

 

 

                 {WHY!}

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • tears.of.silence
    April 8

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    Very very good. Awesome job done on this poem. the feelings, the helplessness was all there. excellent work. You've received 16 points for this poem. You have a total of 46 points. THanks for entering and bets of luck to you. kahy


  • Nam
    April 6

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    "Evermore questioning her faith in the lord" -- I feel that "lord" would work better as "Lord".

    "Exucating thoughts of writing her will smothers her in pain" -- "Exucating" did you mean "Executing"?

    My grandfather had Dementia in the last few years of his life, quite saddening seeing who he was and seeing who he was turning into. Anyway, a nice poem here.

    -Nam


  • Manoj Sanyal
    March 21
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    very emotional acrostic poem.
    Good luck,


  • Truetome
    March 11

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    Such a sad write, yet I wish there were more hopeful somewhere within the pain... just my wish I guess, yet reality sets in that which you expressed in a deep way. LOVE,


  • Rovingone gold member
    March 5
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    Oh, that is so painfully aware. Alzheimer's is such a painful reality for so many. How often I've seen it. The worst part is the poor soul imprisoned inside a withering body turning to a vegetable and not being able to do anything about it. You brought such a truth to the picture. Truly amazing.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 4

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    Dear D....such a characterization of Alzheimers disease in acrostic! Such penning with imagery....A very good write!


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    March 3

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    Awe, this is so sad (tears). I felt all that she would feel with this disease and it is so sad to have it. Fabulous write, very creative.


    • DinkyDiver gold member
      March 3
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      Glad you liked ;-) unfortunately these are the people i look afta at the home :'( and tomorrow Im at the hospital. You might a poem i have- 'like young carer' i will post you the link when Im next online xx


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 3
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    well done, this was very creative..thanks for entering and good luck

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