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Weather

We loved in sunshine
on green grass
under white clouds
dancing in each others ecstasy
clinging together like
benighted youth is prone to do.

We fought in thunderstorms
casting lightning bolts into hearts
shaking with torrential rage
and destroyed one anothers innocence.

We parted in foggy morning
three quick steps
and we couldn't see the other
and all the misery was forgotten.

We met again at chill dawn
and the blush of morning
wove a web of forgetfulness
and the threatening thunderstorms were forgotten
we came together like children
tentative but determined.

We loved in sunshine...

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 6, 2009

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    well you revealed the story of this life and touched the universal philosophy around the poetry..well thought and well focused as well..


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    March 5, 2009

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    Oh my goodness! This brings me BACKKKK!! It's like my childhood in poetic form. Aww, It's amazing. Like we didn't have a care in the world & all we wanted was fun. Very well written(: I enjoyed reading it


    • Rashida
      March 5, 2009
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      Thank you... I really wasn't expecting to write this piece, it just popped into my head and had to be written.