In this moment, I can see the girl I want to be
As I look at you looking at me
A smile so sweet and a kiss so soft
I never knew this feeling before
I hold your hand and you pull me close
There are things about you I wish to know
Telling you my secrets, on a red tattered blanket
Staring up at the stars, the ones in your eyes so much brighter
I lean against you and you grow so quiet
There's something on your mind, you try to hide it
I ask what's wrong and you just shake your head
I don't understand, what did I do
I watch the stars and pull away
You pull me back and go "There's something I need to say"
I sit quietly and let you work your way through
"Chelsea, I love you, and it gets worse than that."
I smile, the pain in my heart, worse? What?
"I think I've fallen in love with you too."
I just smile and whisper me too
Author notes
Bad. Will edit. But my fave moment
A contest entry
- press rewind by Jersene.
1500 points, ended March 26, 2009, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think yall?
Comments
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There is a tender quietness about this moment. I like how it starts soft, and ends with emotion. Well done. Thank you for entering
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Dang...
I can see this happening before my eyes. The deep feeling expressed and the ending powerfull. I loved the feeling of lack of knowing where to go here in the beginining and the learning along the way. Keep it up girl!!!
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Awww, I cried when i read this its so soft and sweat. Great work here and the ending is wonderful jus as well. Keep writting!
~ Chelsey
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